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Diffident Deprecation: Heart vs. Mind

Post by *.HarleQuin.* »

It's that I'm confused more like hesitating
i guess ur gonna have to get used to me contemplating
they're things about me that u must not know
the feelings i wont show, should let u know, that we just wont grow
my moods are inconsistent, how could u like me so?
No im sorry but these feelings for me must go
it's not that i don't feel that way too.. really i do
but i really don't wanna hurt u
ive told u somethings but there will never be enough trust to tell u everything

Then again at one point i sed i wouldn't tell u anything
does this mean i really like u and im giving in?
they say going against ur heart is a living sin


yeah but see i can go through this 'love' thing again
i'm a girl who needs to be listened to and appreciated
and besides the feelings u vindicated
i don't think u can fulfill that from the behavior uve demonstrated

Maybe i shouldn't judge u by what other guys have fabricated
i hope i don't only like u because ur hilarious when ur faded lol
i should just really let things go and stop making everything so complicated
i mean im always thinking about u, even when what im doing and u aren't related


but seriously think about the effects of u and i equated...
i cant believe im even thinking this, its fuckin ludicrous
im really curious, how can i take someone like u serious?
im not looking to starting a new beginning thats just gonna be an end
see im not trying to be a bitch, just remember this is my heart to defend

but then again can we really survive with just u being my 'friend'?
but what if i gave u my all and we were happy together
and maybe ill stop thinking all guys are all birds of the same feather
i suppose i should stop with the maybes and let time tell what this may be

i guess only time will tell ...
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Post by Viral »

this poem is tight...i like it...def feel the emotions in it...i like that goin back n forth on the decisions..haha...good stuff....keep it up!!
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Post by SlickMex »

Yooo..this a great poem..filled with emotions..liked the conflict within i can relate to this on a certain level..
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thanks for the feed..uppin
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Post by -TraMaTiK- »

definetly good shit....kinda simple with vocab but had good meanin..nice drop sam..keep @ it -1-
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Post by Momeijah »

Last Line Was ill Lol. Best Closer Haha, Nice Use Of Vocab Once Again And it Flowed Nice. Never Really Seen Multis But Nyeh its a Poem And it Worked.

and maybe ill stop thinking all guys are all birds of the same feather
i suppose i should stop with the maybes and let time tell what this may be
^Fav Bar Of The Whole Thing And Sick as a Closer Lol.

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Post by |.R.SON.aLL.| »

This is a Solid Piece yo` ..
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Mos Def There Was Some emotion There ..
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Post by *.HarleQuin.* »

thanks for all the feed..vince i agree i could have been more complex but ur not that complex in ur thoughts u know and thats the aim i was going for..like everyday thoughts anyway uppin
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Post by RH1NO »

nice drop
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thanks ..
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ur welcome!
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^Stole My Fuckin idea AGAIN lol
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Post by Spoof »

This was a nice poem, very emotional and I think that quite many girls can relate to your words :)

Then again at one point i sed i wouldn't tell u anything
does this mean i really like u and im giving in?
they say going against ur heart is a living sin

yeah but see i can go through this 'love' thing again
i'm a girl who needs to be listened to and appreciated
and besides the feelings u vindicated
i don't think u can fulfill that from the behavior uve demonstrated
^^^^^my fav parts of it
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