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ill kick in your door cuz im bored n steal ya wardrobe /
flee in your ford probe wit the key i found in the floor board/
get home count the cheese rockin your tee wit the logo/
clothes dont fit though da guy stand 6'4" wit no tip toes /
like "midgets" wit "legos" you "built" like a yard gnome"/
come back pissed n deal wit this riiff raff leave ya far from home/
ill get ya kidnapped you aint gangster ya borrowed chrome/
carve ya dome wit shards till ya scarred up n barfin foam/
i blow like a nuclear trumpet grab a gram n bump it/
fuck wit me ill leave ya cut up with just stumps n shit/
you cant stop the guys shine cuz your lamps wearin shades/
my wrist n hand clamp ya face ill amp this place reppin tampa bay/
im so fuckin dirty cant find more shitty or gutter/
ask about me in the streets of ybor city motherfucker/
rippin through ya "sweet" "torso" like you got "candy" "ribs"/
dip your feet in concrete n toss you off of gandy bridge/
i know cats will be in the mirror wit hard looks spittin my bars/
i cant make it no clearer create bars n hooks while im splittin dis gar/
i could beat superman the way im swingin bars of kryptonite/
im bored out of my find but still bringin another hit tonight/
Last edited by RH1NO on Sat Jun 09, 2007 6:30 am, edited 1 time in total.
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Post by ~*Blitz*~ »

*makes a note to self to ask around ybor*
WHEW for Tampa!

So...you're elevating an ass load, this is the best drop I've seen from you...Im proud of you kiddo! lmao j/k ok anyway, your vocab was nice the rhyming was cool and everything went together pretty well. I enjoyed the read so props to you
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so its clear i was fuckin around with like a quarter of this in the shoutbox but thought it had some potential n didnt want to lose it so if it sounds familiar that is why that is all
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Yea man..SWAT TEAM..Keep it up..imma drop sumthin 2morro..
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you could have worded this alot better flow was choppy too you did have some nice punches in there though it was probley your best drop keep it man...

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"sweet" "torso" like you got "candy" "ribs"/
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..Fuck that gay shit you say on a beat..
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Post by ~Symbolikull~ »

this was nice man, i like all the metas and wordplay, it was tight, and creative. by far the best structure ive seen from you ...lol and the best verse as well. keep elevatin man.
i'll smack yuh with rage i force multis outta my ass to the page
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appreciate feed from everyone
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