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16 Micz
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Dreaming With Words(I Stand Here Vol.3)

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http://illestlyrics.com/board/freestyle ... t4188.html
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http://illestlyrics.com/board/damn-vt4174.html

you see, i've been questioned on talent, damaged self esteem with words
who would ever think these-nerds, de-served, the time to witness what hes earned
but as the trees burn, lights die, night flies, those same wise guys
showed me things that i couldnt see with my eyes, but now attempting to blind mine
but ill shine fine, with the help of these words, and that old skeezer
complexity isnt what i deserve, multi-king, please sir
i never need words, to show me how bad these dreams hurt
i went from chillin where the streets curve, and watching feins be served
you see complexity isnt the word, rapping isnt the verb
attacking with action, leaving brain cells bashing and crashing
im happily clapping, and still dramatically laughing..happy?
i've only conquered dreams, and chill with the most sponsered team
DP, the people that haunt chur dreams,leaving your love mates on their knees
how wrong was he, wondering how i come up with a sqaud so mean
i stand here with an honest conscience, nothing i write is nonsense
i dont make claims to be IL favorite, like that guy who battle kawnvikt
i only battle those who are worth the time, unless im proving their absurd with rhymes
never served a dime,u'd swear they heard my rhymes the way i blow their minds
you still think in these rhymes i fuck around?its nothing clown
you could super glue domino on top,i wont even use a punch, ill flick that fucker down
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Post by SlickMex »

Liked it..had some great lines..
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Post by complexity »

lmao. seriously pretty impressive. without a doubt the most complicated rhyme scheme you have used to date.

i've only conquered dreams, and chill with the most sponsered team
DP, the people that haunt chur dreams,leaving your love mates on their knees
how wrong was he, wondering how i come up with a sqaud so mean

them were the sickest lines in my opinion plus representing

I liked the story. Even though it feels like you have went over it like 2000 times! Lmao
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Post by 16 Micz »

thanks guys, i really appreciate it...still uppin for more feed and ill return the favor if u drop a link...
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Post by B-Bear »

guess i should return the favour micz..
i really liked this piece, especially the way u're wording yourself.. i missed the flow a few times, cause of the length of bars, try and do somthin bout that.. i felt u sorta dropped a bit in quality at the end, but the last line kinda saved ya ass.. keep droppin!

you still think in these rhymes i fuck around?its nothing clown
you could super glue domino on top,i wont even use a punch, ill flick that fucker down

hahaha.. nice line..
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Post by MesaR »

you still think in these rhymes i fuck around?its nothing clown
you could super glue domino on top,i wont even use a punch, ill flick that fucker down

Felling that line man...it was goood micz..
Still Uppin for some more feed..!!
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..Fuck that gay shit you say on a beat..
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Post by |.R.SON.aLL.| »

Lmfao ..
Good Shit Micz ..
it Flowed Hella Nice Fam ..
Tha Closer Was ill ..
Nice Lil Jab ..
& a Nice Way to Rep DP ..
Multies Was ill as Hell too ..
Haha ..
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.. it`s S.a.W Bitches ..
.. Niggas ain't Fuckin Wit Tha Team ..

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Post by RH1NO »

first line was gay n i almost stopped readin but as much as i hate 2 say nice drop i liked it
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Post by Multi~Ply »

hm, not bad except multi king has already been taken by me, maybe next time though
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Post by drunken jesus »

looks like your drunken jesus fan club membership payed off

probably the best piece i've seen from you, the wordplay, similies, multis, flow etc was all there
Respect this, specialist, black, testing this and get ya necklace jacked
Your after name scratched up off my guestlist, party freak
You the type of nigga that'll hardly speak unless you spoken to
You throw a cold screw but sober up when I'm approaching you
At the same time we postin two niggaz on that ass
Thats gonna do what they supposed to do the limelight
Snatched away from you because its my night
Killarm' blaze hotter than twilight, you better get ya lines right
Half of these crabs cant even rhyme right
[Killa Sin]

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Post by 16 Micz »

well, thanks for the feedback, i had to prove that i still had something in me, i guess thats all the feed im gettin so..PEACE
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Post by ~Symbolikull~ »

prolly the best thing ive read from you

word of the day: elevation

the closer was ill man, the whole piece flowed very well. its was mos def dope as hell man, not many quotables, but everything fit together very well

8.3/10
i'll smack yuh with rage i force multis outta my ass to the page
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Post by Momeijah »

Deffo The Most Thorough Piece ive Read From u Lol. a Lot Of Quotables And u Taken ur Style To The Next Level id Say. Used a Lot More Consistent Multis And inner Rhymes.

you see complexity isnt the word, rapping isnt the verb
attacking with action, leaving brain cells bashing and crashing
im happily clapping, and still dramatically laughing..happy?
^Example, Similar To a Rakim Style Lol. So id Say Keep That Up. Some Nice Punches And Flowed a Lot More Easier That Other Shit i Seen From u. And a Lot More Of ur Lines Had Meaning. Other Shit i Seen From u Aint Got Filler Lines id Say But u Like.. Maybe Worded it Wrong And Missed The Point So Good To See ur Doing That a Lot Less Lol. And Oh Nice Closer, Fuckin Tosser Lol.
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