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Over-Time by complexity

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Over-Time by Complexity


yo i'm not in a sober-mind, 3:00 am, actually its over-time

16 Micz- I heard tom, beat a man to death
Chedda- Its ok, I'll protect you
Apostle- Protect me too
Ariel- like this is all scary
Mandy- like totally
Apostle: HELP
Mandy- I'm going to look for a urinal
Ariel- like ok

she knew she heard foot-steps//
at the moment would have took-bets//
fell to the ground when she looked-next//
then was dragged to the urinal with hooked-pecks//

she was told to bow-down-n-kiss//
then she got drowned-in-piss//
bleeding around her-tits//
back at the camp,she wasn't getting found-or-missed//

Chedda: When are we going to bed
16 Micz: After the girls
Chedda: oh ok
Ariel: i'm going to take the car to the store
Apostle: Get gas

ariel, knew chedda does pack-heat//
so she got the soup out the back-seat//
shouldn't have took her eyes off that-street//
cuz she went out the window quicker than a rap-beat//

ten minutes later she was standing//
the same place she took the landing//
then their was a mysterious sound, and a bar crushed her hand-in//
deeper in the ground than planting, back at the fire they were ranting//

16 Micz: Woo, I love lemonade, so much sugar
Apostle: Yah, I'm hyper, lets get naked
Chedda: ok let's do it
16 Micz: i need to go to the bathroom
Apostle: ok we will wait
Mandy? Mandy? i hope that tom thing was a tall-tale//
tried to use his cellphone but the call-failed//
soon as he saw the stall-he-bailed//
I'M ALIVE SHE YELLS, the lights is all-he-trailed//

shit, i'll never be able to be fuckin-a-male//
"god dammit!" why am i the only one who didn't have luck-in-a-jail//
suddenly he tripped on a rock, wished he flipped-on-a-cock//
instantly got whipped-by-a-sock, that was equipped-with-a-rock//

Chedda: Stop Micz, where is everybody
Micz: I wont stop

Then tom comes out with some damp-wires//
yelled im the one who is talked about at camp-fires//
ur tramps-tired, i took their blood like vampires//
he laughed with his hands up with clamped-pliers//

wrapped the wire around the two-fools//
the wires were connected and ran thru-pools//
kid's were sweating with a few-drools//
he connected the socket & then got new-tools//

@ this is hypothetical, I only verbally murder mc's...
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second four bar sections multis were all fucked up but this was a pretty cool story, original idea
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defiantly, but thanks for the feedback, i'm sure it made the read more irritating.
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its pretty straight good to see shit from u now..haha..peacce
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