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This is Just Somethin i Wrote Less Lyrics For My Cousin Who We Just Found Out a Few Days Ago Has Cancer.. at Age 16.

The Scary Thing is That u Might Never Live To Read-This ..||
i Don't Get How a Good Person Gets Plagued With This Weakness ..||
And Assholes, Rapists And Killers Are Free, Life's a Mean-Bitch ..||
Like u Must've Been Hitler in a Past Life, Or Helped Nail Jesus ..||
i'm 'Full Of Questions' Like The Riddler's Suit, Nothing i Do-Helps ..||
So im Patiently Waiting On u Awakening With Full-Health ..||
Even Though i Can't Be Here Now, ill Always Keep To Date Like 'is She Safe-is-She?' ..||
i Can't Wait-To-See ur Health 'Blossom Like Spring' When This 'Patient-Leaves' ..||
We Always Got Along Like Best Friends, u Leavin Would Be a Robbery ..||
Not Just For Me, The Family, Friends, Cuz u Were Never a Problem-See ..||
i Could Understand if u Were Old And Grey, Or a Horrible Person ..||
But Born With a Health Problem, That Started To Steadily Worsen ..||
And You'd Never Be Evil, So im Askin What Are You Paying-For? ..||
it Doesn't Make Sense at All, Bad Luck Cannot Explain-This-Naw ..||
Hopefully ur Back To Almost Normal, To See ur Birthday-at-Least ..||
This Has To Be The Worst Present Ever For u, it's Like Unearthin-a-Beast ..||
And u Just Found Out That u Were Gnna Be an Aunt-Soon ..||
All i Can Say is Never Give Up Hope, Cuz u Come So Far-Too ..||
Some People Could Never Live a Day in ur Shoes, Me-included ..||
But ur The Best Cousin Ever And id Love To See-u-Through-This ..||



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Post by *.HarleQuin.* »

Even Though i Can't Be Here Now, ill Always Keep To Date Like 'is She Safe-is-She?' ..||
i Can't Wait-To-See ur Health 'Blossom Like Spring' When This 'Patient-Leaves' ..||
^ fav line

this was really good, even tho its for a sad cause..i love ur multies, im gonna propose soon = )
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thats was a great drop..hope she gets better..
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Post by B-Bear »

yeah, def a nice drop... no, a fuckin great drop.. really feelin u man, almost been there myself...found out my father didn't have cancer tho, but the feelings while we waited for the test results.. damn.. that piece was great..
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Thanx For The Feed Ppl :D Lol Uppin
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Post by sarahotic »

this is really touching if you can grasp what its like... and i mean cancer at 16 is pretty fucked up to find out. good luck to your cousin and your family.

i Don't Get How a Good Person Gets Plagued With This Weakness ..||
And Assholes, Rapists And Killers Are Free, Life's a Mean-Bitch ..||
Like u Must've Been Hitler in a Past Life, Or Helped Nail Jesus ..||

^^^^ my fav part
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Post by ~*Blitz*~ »

I agree with Sara, this is a deep piece that actually gave the chills when I read it, unfortunatley alot of us can relate to a piece like this and if you've been there and done that then this piece really hits home. Props on it, you did an amazing job writing it. there were so many good bars and the way it was worded just really stood out. Good JOb Ferdinand <3!
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i Don't Get How a Good Person Gets Plagued With This Weakness ..||
And Assholes, Rapists And Killers Are Free, Life's a Mean-Bitch ..||
Like u Must've Been Hitler in a Past Life, Or Helped Nail Jesus ..||

^^favourite

nice emotions jon i didnt think u had it in ya
liked this tho
hope she gets better soon
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Post by Momeijah »

Thanks For The Feed Ppl :) lol. Good 2 Kno Yall Liked it, Didnt Wnna Write Her Somethin Wack Ya Feel Me?
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i Could Understand if u Were Old And Grey, Or a Horrible Person ..||
But Born With a Health Problem, That Started To Steadily Worsen ..||
And You'd Never Be Evil, So im Askin What Are You Paying-For? ..||
it Doesn't Make Sense at All, Bad Luck Cannot Explain-This-Naw ..||

^^ damn looks you put alota tought into this its a deep piece i actually read this one over twice i was really feelin it keep em droppin
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Post by Lawgix »

that whole thing moved me man... my prayers are with u and urs... tell her to get well soon from everybody at Illest Lyrics...
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Post by -TraMaTiK- »

nice homie...hope all goes well..i pray 4 ya fam no doubt..nice emotional piece doe..-1-
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Lol Shit i Think This is The Best Feedback i Ever Got, Thnx For The Comments All!
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Post by precise »

excellent drop bro, nice lines, lotsa heart in it
what kind of cancer does she have?
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And Assholes, Rapists And Killers Are Free, Life's a Mean-Bitch ..||
Like u Must've Been Hitler in a Past Life, Or Helped Nail Jesus ..||

favorite line but yea man thats some pretty dope shit...as well as deep, i can tell u put some soul and heart into this...good luck with that man..real talk i cant say i know how it is or anything but im sure its stressful and painful and from reading that bar i can tell where ur mind is(not trying to be a physic or anything) but yea..but keep it up man...
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