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you can like me or not im the cream of the crop
every drop is hot bitches like its steam from a pot
im on point like a beam from a dot
thats aimed for ya headpiece homie if you scheming to plot
you already know im sick with it --flows ridiculous
dont rub me the wrong way urbans not ticklish
my riddles get complex rhymes are sacred temples
if i hit faggots with lead believe it wont be from pencils
thoughts so mental, i guess i smoke to much sticky
turn fools 360 if they acting iffy with me
shifty bitches know real quickly not to push me
im sick like 8 dicks looking for octopussy
i got that aquaboogie, urban aint no rookie
with a knack to stack more chips than chocalate cookies
dont ever overlook me or fuck with a sleeping giant
wake me ain't no damn way that urban is keeping silent
i speak in violence got yall walking on pins and needles
everything i do to motherfuckers simply ends with evil
and the people i roll with are cut throats and we don't play fair
so if you spitting nursery rhymes please keep that shit in daycares
ill break down the rule book .. ill dismantle~spits
never deliver or spit it cold urban holds more hea than candle sticks
my whole concept is to eat emcees..mistreat emcees and beat emcees
to the point where my lyrics pin point your weaknesses
need i go further competition urban will murder
been the big mac before mcdonalds invented burgers

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Post by ~*Blitz*~ »

dont rub me the wrong way urbans not ticklish

^^ lol! I liked that line

Niccceee drop, it was sketchy but the rhyming was dope. Hawt shit, lets see another
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Post by ~Symbolikull~ »

Best Rookie to this Site Ive Seen Bro.

I would quote some shit but you whole verse, well fuck it...

dont ever overlook me or fuck with a sleeping giant
wake me ain't no damn way that urban is keeping silent
i speak in violence got yall walking on pins and needles
everything i do to motherfuckers simply ends with evil
and the people i roll with are cut throats and we don't play fair
so if you spitting nursery rhymes please keep that shit in daycares

^^^^great lines

you can like me or not im the cream of the crop
every drop is hot bitches like its steam from a pot
im on point like a beam from a dot
thats aimed for ya headpiece homie if you scheming to plot
you already know im sick with it --flows ridiculous
dont rub me the wrong way urbans not ticklish
my riddles get complex rhymes are sacred temples
if i hit faggots with lead believe it wont be from pencils
thoughts so mental, i guess i smoke to much sticky
turn fools 360 if they acting iffy with me
shifty bitches know real quickly not to push me
im sick like 8 dicks looking for octopussy

^^^^also great

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Post by 8th »

this was pretty good.

turn fools 360 if they acting iffy with me

^favorite line. sounds gutter.

but yeah, you had some nice multis. I think if you up you vocab you'd elevate crazy fast. Its flowed allright, some times the flow was interupted though. maybe it was the variations in the line length. I would aslo liked to see a less played topic. Overall, i'd say work on vocab and flow and you'd elevate real damn fast.

welcome, and keep dropin.
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Post by |.R.SON.aLL.| »

you can like me or not im the cream of the crop
every drop is hot bitches like its steam from a pot
im on point like a beam from a dot
thats aimed for ya headpiece homie if you scheming to plot
^^ .. That Flowed Hella Good ..
Multies Was Deffo On Point ..
Tha Punch Was Solid ..

you already know im sick with it --flows ridiculous
dont rub me the wrong way urbans not ticklish
^^ .. Nice ..

Overall - Sick Drop ..
Tha Flow Was Nice as Hell ..
i`m Very impressed ..
U One Of Tha Best i Seen On Tha Site in a Minute ..
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Post by MesaR »

Yeah Man Nice Nice...
Multies Were On Point...
And Heaps Of Funny Shit In There To
Lets See Another Drop
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..Fuck that gay shit you say on a beat..
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Post by complexity »

I thought this was pretty straight. You have talent without a doubt.

I think some of the punchlines were a little played though. That's the only drawback to this piece. Be a little more creative. When using them. Or don't use so many.

You have solid wording. The schemes were decent. Like 8th said the flow did get lost a little bit.

I would give this an 8.5/10. Keep it up man.
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Post by urbanhistory »

thanks for the feed yall ima keep droppin em
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Post by LadySam »

nice! i wont get all technical haha but yes nice <3
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