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The Last Piece(of garbage)

Post by Ambiguous Realm »

i'll come at u bare like porn-events, hang opponents like ornaments, bodies all torn-to-bits, i was born-to-win every tournament... so like huricanes i flushed-the-news, it was 'complex' cuz i was rushed-to-lose so u can fuck urself the same way Hitler crushed-the-Jews

don't be 'disappointed' just don't expect-me-to-write!
and remove Smoke from the text-next-to-ya-site.(on google)



fuck structure in rap when i'm speakin-my-mind, sentences..each-in-a-rhyme
cuz i'm creepin-behind beneath-in-ya-spine to weaken-ya-climb,
so once ur half way up ur ready-to-drop, (and if ur still alive...)
i'll fuckin kill u!..like a virus cuz i'm too deadly-to-stop




lungs collapsed cuz u wouldn't breathe-when-u-could,
this venom's in ya skin.. it's deep-in-ya-blood,
i'm droppin clues like the thieves-in-ya-hood,
so here's the hint... i'm leavin-for-good...
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Post by ~Symbolikull~ »

damn thats fire before smoke.... why you gotta quit jus spit when you can man. dont give up youd jus be another quittin loser.
i'll smack yuh with rage i force multis outta my ass to the page
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Post by MesaR »

crushing Jews Line Was Funny
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..Fuck that gay shit you say on a beat..
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Post by -TraMaTiK- »

~Symbolikull~ wrote:damn thats fire before smoke.... why you gotta quit jus spit when you can man. dont give up youd jus be another quittin loser.
i agree wit him^
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Post by B-Bear »

yeah.. shit was hot.. he just tryin to play precious man.. haha.. that's why his mumblin bout' quittin all the time..
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Post by Typeo »

Good shit like usual man, but eh...You make it seem forced with some of the multis. Not all of them rhyme that well, but if it was actually spit it would flow damn nice. Wouldn't say multis...but flow is fucking on.
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Post by Spoof »

wow great stuff! sounds good and flowed well

my fav lines:
i'll come at u bare like porn-events, hang opponents like ornaments, bodies all torn-to-bits, i was born-to-win every tournament... so like huricanes i flushed-the-news, it was 'complex' cuz i was rushed-to-lose so u can fuck urself the same way Hitler crushed-the-Jews

fuck structure in rap when i'm speakin-my-mind, sentences..each-in-a-rhyme
cuz i'm creepin-behind beneath-in-ya-spine to weaken-ya-climb,
so once ur half way up ur ready-to-drop, (and if ur still alive...)
i'll fuckin kill u!..like a virus cuz i'm too deadly-to-stop

keep it up!
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Post by B-Bear »

Spoof wrote:
my fav lines:
i'll come at u bare like porn-events, hang opponents like ornaments, bodies all torn-to-bits, i was born-to-win every tournament... so like huricanes i flushed-the-news, it was 'complex' cuz i was rushed-to-lose so u can fuck urself the same way Hitler crushed-the-Jews

fuck structure in rap when i'm speakin-my-mind, sentences..each-in-a-rhyme
cuz i'm creepin-behind beneath-in-ya-spine to weaken-ya-climb,
so once ur half way up ur ready-to-drop, (and if ur still alive...)
i'll fuckin kill u!..like a virus cuz i'm too deadly-to-stop
That's like the whole verse.. haha..
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Post by urbanhistory »

^^ lmao shit was good structure kinda all over but a good drop over all
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Post by ~*Blitz*~ »

Yeah this was defo a hawt piece, good shit
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Post by |.R.SON.aLL.| »

Yeah ..
This Piece Was Sick ..
Tha Multies Were On Point ..
Kinda Fell Off On Some Parts ..
But i Liked Tha Verse Overall ..
Wordplay Was Deffo Nice ..
Structure Coulda Used Some Work ..
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.. it`s S.a.W Bitches ..
.. Niggas ain't Fuckin Wit Tha Team ..

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Post by complexity »

Over-rated drop. The last bars weren't good at all.

The opening paragraph was the best. It had nice flow & was on point.

The rest was blah.

The multis are really the only thing that was real nice about this drop.

8/10. Not hating. Just the truth. It was still pretty dope if it didn't take you long. Which I'm sure it didn't. Just leaving honest feedback. Something people need to learn to do.
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