Untitled, Me Tryin My Hand at Story-Raps Lol

[Momeijah]

Aright, This is Less Lyrical, More Story Telling, im Tryin My Hand at This Shit So im a Newbie Lol. it's About a Vampire Born in The 1850's That Got Bitten When he Was 20 So He's Stuck in That Body. The Rest is Self Explanatory. Negative Feed Welcome 2 @ 16 Micz Lool.

immortality Was an Up-Side Of an Emotional-Ride ..||
With No Ending To Anything And a Notion-To-Hide ..||
Losing Trust in Friends-That-Aged And Died-With-Time ..||
Till i'd Never Attempt-To-Gain a Friend i'd Just Cry-And-Hide ..||
Away, And Kill Passers By And Live Off innocent-Souls ..||
No Emotion a Physical Tool Like a Militant-Coach ..||
i Came Out in The 50's To Make it Big-in-The-City ..||
Like a Gypsy i Wandered i Used To Kick-it-in-Philly ..||
Stuck in My 20 Year Old Body But i Was Really a Hundred ..||
Cuz When i Was 20 i Got Bitten Now it's Blood That i Hunger ..||
So a Friday Night i Developed a Taste-For-The-Wine ..||
Sittin in a Smokey Bar, Alcohol Was Takin-it's-Time ..||
This is 'Social?' a Bunch Of Suits Sitting Flaunting-The-Paper ..||
Cigars in Their Mouths i'll Sure Be Haunting-Them-Later ..||
Lighting a Cigar i Took a Draw And Started Coughing-in-Pain ..||
They Looked at Me Like a Freak, im a Laughing Stock-it's-a-Shame ..||
Trying To Laugh it Off And Look Away, Weak? im Not-it's-Ok ..||
Suddenly a Stunning Girl Emerged Up Onto-The-Stage ..||
i Squirmed in My Stool And Tried To Look a Little-Cool ..||
And They Noticed, Eyebrows Raised at Her Like 'He's Tryin To Hit-On-You' ..||
Her Eyes Fixed To The Wall, And Singing Like She Was Bored-Of-it ..||
The Suits Mumbling That She Sucked, But i Wanted To Hear More-Of-it ..||
Me Drinking What Should Kill a Human, Shocking Ppl i'd Just Laugh-it-Up ..||
They Like Me Now, Asking HOW? i Laughed 'Cuz Vampires Cant-Get-Drunk' ..||
The Girl's Calm Voice Stayed, Playing On Like a Recording ..||
ignorant Suits Trying Hard To Drown Her Out Through Their Talking ..||
She Left The Stage With a Sigh, And Took The Stool Next-To-Me ..||
And i Guessed Since She Worked There, The Drinks She Would Get-For-Free ..||
i Told Her i Liked The Set, She Smiled And She-Replied ..||
'Thanks, And By The Way My Name is Deeana, Nice To Meet-You-Guy ..||
i Told Her My Name, And Soon We Started Talkin, Magically ..||
She Was Only 18, And Came From a Brazilian Family ..||
We Had a Lot in Common, Then She Asked To Go Back To Her-Place ..||
So We Left, And My Body Started To Give Me The Nerve-Play ..||
Dark Streets, Possible Victim, it Should Be Easy To Pull-Off ..||
But i Could Deal With it Easily So i Calmed Down and Moved-On ..||
We Arrived at Her Apartment, Nearly Tripping On Loose Carpet ..||
This Place Reminded Me Of The House Of a Cheap Harlet ..||
She Opened More Alcohol, And Started Spillin Her Life-Out ..||
We Spoke For Ages About Everything, it Was Deep in The Night-Now ..||
u See Her Fiance Left Her After He Hit The Dividend ..||
Now She's Busy With 2 Jobs, And Still Really a Kid-it's-Sick ..||
Working Days And By The Night She'd Be in a Bar Singin-Shit ..||
But Never Gained Attention She Was Tempted To Finish-it ..||
Tellin Me She Didn't Know Why Nobody Was Listenin ..||
Explainin Her Fiance Was a Business-Man ..||
But Left Her in The Gutter as Soon as He Hit-a-Grand ..||
She Downed More, Now im Waiting For The Shit 2 Hit-The-Fan ..||
i Never Knew What To Do When She Started To Lift-Her-Hands ..||
as Her Neck Drew Closer i Was Tempted To Sink-My-Fangs ..||
......To Be Continued Lol......




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[LadySam]

lmfao@ this bein about a vampire in the 1850'sahh lmao legend <3

[URKMAN]

Nice

[URKMAN]

Nice

[*.HarleQuin.*]

i like it with ur a million and 2 multies

[16 Micz]

pretty nice, althought pretty basic the storyline kept me interested..the vampire thing was kind of weird and stupid but towards the end the story got better...anyway story rapping is pretty good not many rappers could pull it off, but u still suck..im not too good at story rapping myself

[Momeijah]

Ty All Lol. And Yeah 16 Micz, im Not Really Onto The 'Discriptive' Level Yet But im Workin On it.