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LadieHazard
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A Verse For ma Papi

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Down 4 u... Not matta What

Papi this is Bonnie n Clyde Remix in Tha Maken/
Any bullets Fired at chu im Down for the taken/
When im Not around i kno that chu be Missen me/
im Home Now Caress me slow n start kissin me/
No Need to Worry Im ya Down ass Bitch/
Kno That any Bullet Fired They Will Surely Be Missed/
We ride Together We die toGether Thas What Motto we follow/
Took me a while To get in to Hear which was once Empty,hollow/
Youll always be ma Heart Cus u never skiped a Beat/
U da Thug Nigga that came n swept me off ma feet/
Bitchs Call me Nasty Cus i like da Taste of ya Dick/
Only Because u Da Nigga i kno Fasho ima stick wit/
Im Not No Prude Bitch Mutha Fuckaz i Love to Please Ma Dude/
Leaven a Nigga wit blue Ballz Come on Ladies How Rude/
Mutha fuckaz mite Hate n say That this shits Corney/
But no one can do it Like u When ya Gangsta Bitch is Horney/

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Post by Haz »

Nice Babie ur Gettin Betta Wid Ya Structure
i Seen Multis So Ur Gettin Da Hang Ov Dat
It Was HOtt To Me Good Shit Ur Steppin ya Game Up
Hott Linez : "We ride Together We die toGether Thas What Motto we follow/
Took me a while To get in to Hear which was once Empty,hollow/
Youll always be ma Heart Cus u never skiped a Beat/
U da Thug Nigga that came n swept me off ma feet/ "

"Mutha fuckaz mite Hate n say That this shits Corney/
But no one can do it Like u When ya Gangsta Bitch is Horney/ " Deffinitly Keep Droppin Aiight Love
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need to drop a link...so feed on mine lols
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..Fuck that gay shit you say on a beat..
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Post by Viral »

SequencE wrote:need to drop a link...so feed on mine lols

mines way better then urs sequence..lol...so check MINE out!..lol VIRAL!


anyways


Yeah that was pretty nice..i liked it...u def stepped up from the last verse i seen from you..stay up n do wat u do...
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Im Not No Prude Bitch Mutha Fuckaz i Love to Please Ma Dude/
Leaven a Nigga wit blue Ballz Come on Ladies How Rude/

^^^ LOL @ that

good shit chicka
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Post by LadieHazard »

LoL Thas whassup mami Thankz
Think iM Trippin? Tie Ma Shoe...
Cant Stand me? Sit the fuck Down...
Cant Face me? Then Turn the Fuck around...

u Cant Break The Bitch That Thinkz Nothin Of u!
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Post by complexity »

That was pretty good. First bar was my personal favorite.
I would just work on using some more complex similies, metas, wordplay.
Multis should come naturally. I don't think Pa will agree.
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