Two worlds collide

[vanity]

you reside inside my heart, sweetheart
side by side we will never ever be apart
our worlds collide its just the start
together we are clever like Picasso’s art
strangers better admire us from a far
decipher us never! see thats so hard
we are unique, we are one of a kind
when i speak you can read my mind
my trust for you, you’ve won with time
my heart skips beats, yet urs beats along with mine
things may get hard from time to time
but everything is always fine, like Miley rhymes
life has uphill battles but its about the climb
when we meet i feel complete, its so real feels so right
when our minds combine, like gods we shine
we light the skies so bright, like fireworks in the night
we might inspire jerks to start some fights, but it's alright
they must retire first, cuz i’ll always be with you despite!

[QwarterZ]

This is like another one of those spoken words...got a lot of strong emotion in your lines...you might not be dropping multis but its cool..your dropping some raw feelings which makes a read 10x better...nice little drop right here once again..keep writing

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[vanity]

thanx for ur feedback

[Defiance]

yeah shit reads like poetry. but i liked it on that love tip.
good shit glad to see more female lyricists on the site

[88SkyLink]

This was tight man. I agree with both of them, this was more poetic. But on a whole I liked it, it wasnt too complex but not too simple. It was very emotional, seen alot of stuff like this, but it was very good indeed

[vanity]

ty for ur feed

[TreTru]

i thought i left feed on this...

i was enjoying the emotion on this..and its real poetic..
i like a few of your meta's ..nice..very refreshing to have
another femcee..not many multis but still a a good read
due to some of the imagery you brought...

good stuff Van..

[Haz]

you reside inside my heart, sweetheart
side by side we will never ever be apart
our worlds collide its just the start
together we are clever like Picasso’s art
strangers better admire us from a far
decipher us never! see thats so hard
we are unique, we are one of a kind
when i speak you can read my mind
my trust for you, you’ve won with time
my heart skips beats, yet urs beats along with mine

This part held weight, I liked it.

the second part was good 2. This was a cool read,
I like the emotion and inner rhymes, keep it up

[Shooter]

This was a deep piece that had a-lot of strong emotion and a-lot of strong feelings

Keep up the good work

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