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EL tots irA
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unparalleled
verses,
my work is
beyond compared
unequaled person
stearing in this mirror nothings there :?:
no vampire im a slow dam writer
bt as an artist you need heart this patients is required
bt if your tired retire you suk oscar and his myers :lol:
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Re: mind it

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well uh gota say this the shortest piece ive seen here, i dont like how you use BT as "but" either for some reason ..

uhm..idk what to make of this, redo it lmao.




unparalleled verses, my work is
beyond comparable unequaled persons
stearing in this mirror nothings there :?:
no vampire im a slow dam writer
bt as an artist you need heart this patients is required
bt if your tired retire you suk oscar and his myers


i would at least structure it like that....
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