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Grey Reflecting the black in my pupils
everyday I Step in a trap and It's crucial
Ambitions Speeding, Making it Happen in Neutral
My drive at a rest stop.. well alive
but when It comes to strive,Let's not..
Is it Driving me Mad Or Am I Happy in Place
like no way I Could Be Sad..
I Pick My Outlook Wisely,bitter is Nasty In taste
No unnecessary feeling can dictate my mind
I'm Alive In Rehab..Getting Classy's the case
Mind on my Manners and the way I eat
How To Truly succeed?..Time Is the Answer
Looking at my love one like after the Chemo
there'll be no Sign Of the cancer..
Life's a Journey..Meant to be Told
But everyone doesn't have a gift..
So there eventually cold..
want to escape this matrix..I hate it..
don't want to be an "old slave" like at 70 sold
I never treasured the wrong things..Enemy Gold
wrong brings..a Pouring cycle
No roof to the Shelter u thought You're Entitled
Trying to grip something different Like a foreign rifle
So I switch the angle..Meditating after Iv'e Lit a Candle
Never hitting the casino of life I don't think It's a Gamble
I'm Not Preaching..Teaching..Reaching..Pleading..Teasing
Feeding ya Bullshit..I Don't Sit and Ramble
I'm In the Act Of Accomplishing Like this is the Season I Pull It
Crowd seeing a Bullet..Through my top hat..
Shot back into the barrel as I'm Revealing It After..
Happiness is Certain.. I'm Feeling the laughter
Devil Demanding I'm Bought..L.E.B.E.R Understanding my thoughts
are like reading secret files..Shutting ya mouth,And Sealing Them After
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Re: word 2

Post by Defiance »

dude i really like this piece

great opening lines.. like the random placement of the words lol?

Great content man

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Grey Reflecting the black in my pupils
everyday I Step in a trap and It's crucial

don't want to be an "old slave" like at 70 sold
I never treasured the wrong things..Enemy Gold


solid drop my dude enjoyed it thoroughly had me tapping my feet and bobbing my head shit would go hard over a beat


keep dropping man
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pretty dope drop mang, sounding like some joe budden type of style. i was diggin it. id give a further breakdown if it were necessary but i think it is. good shit though.
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not really much i can say..about this one..shits on point..most of the flo's pretty good. lyrics are dope..
hmm yeah i guess you've been doin this for a minute so props my dude..
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Thanks for the feed
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Re: word 2

Post by Kau the Lion »

I didn't like it as much as word one but still pretty good. Flow was consistent. A few of the rhymes weren't as impressive, though. Felt like you spent a little less time on this one. Overall, a nice drop, though.
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