Self-Esteam

[Kau the Lion]

(Self-Esteam is spelled that way intentionally.)





Too unsure to move but too frightened to stand still.
When it beats this fast my heart's quite a handful.
I speak out a landfill. It's not as hard as it seems,
Like in my dreams as I see me, I speak so free and easy.

But the reality, to me, feels more like a nightmare,
I talk to myself as if somebody might care.
The truth is right there on the tip of my tounge.
The chance is slim to none that my confidence will fight fair.

And speaking of chances I know I need to take more.
This oak needs to take form but I'm still just an acorn.
My childish fears . . . of rejection are effecting
How I choose to make a move. That’s ineffective affection.

My ego is shattered by my Id in self dominance.
My heart is not a lobbyist and I wonder how obvious
It is I'm scared shitless of the opposite sex.
Witness the skittish slip the only odds that he gets.

Not ready, the sweat beads my head and two palms,
Trying in futility to sound cool and calm.
But I’m too far gone and this true heart’s longing
For a chance at romance and a new start bonding.

Would I even know what to do with it if I got it,
If I had you in my pocket or you had me in a locket.
I could draw a picture, perfect. Take my pic insert it
But make a different person, the one that isn’t worthless.

Shake down the problems that restrain me in bondage.
Make out with optics and name your accomplice
It’s a shame how I’m honest, a shame how you’re not then.
A game to admonish my favorite responses.

History is a mystery to me, the past is present.
Can’t see the future or chase that incentive.
Love is a fire, somebody’s liar.
It’s ironic you get burned when a match can end it.





I don't feel like tracking down links. I must've fed a dozen pieces since I last dropped a written. Thanks for reading.

[Kuhlerblynd]

Too unsure to move but too frightened to stand still.
When it beats this fast my heart's quite a handful.
I speak out a landfill. It's not as hard as it seems,
Like in my dreams as I see me, I speak so free and easy.

Fucking flows flawlessly.

But the reality, to me, feels more like a nightmare,
I talk to myself as if somebody might care.
The truth is right there on the tip of my tounge.
The chance is slim to none that my confidence will fight fair.

That second line hit close to home. Also really felt the last part in this section.

And speaking of chances I know I need to take more.
This oak needs to take form but I'm still just an acorn.
My childish fears . . . of rejection are effecting
How I choose to make a move. That’s ineffective affection.

Damn, that first bar is sick man. Nicely worded. And I really like how that second bar came together. Very well done bro.

My ego is shattered by my Id in self dominance.
My heart is not a lobbyist and I wonder how obvious
It is I'm scared shitless of the opposite sex.
Witness the skittish slip the only odds that he gets.

Flow is still on point. That heart not being a lobbyist part is good stuff.

Not ready, the sweat beads my head and two palms,
Trying in futility to sound cool and calm.
But I’m too far gone and this true heart’s longing
For a chance at romance and a new start bonding.

The wording throughout this section was really cool too fam.

Would I even know what to do with it if I got it,
If I had you in my pocket or you had me in a locket.
I could draw a picture, perfect. Take my pic insert it
But make a different person, the one that isn’t worthless.

That first bar is DOPE!! The second bar is deep.

Shake down the problems that restrain me in bondage.
Make out with optics and name your accomplice
It’s a shame how I’m honest, a shame how you’re not then.
A game to admonish my favorite responses.

The flow is fucking crazy here. Multi's are mad abundant.

History is a mystery to me, the past is present.
Can’t see the future or chase that incentive.
Love is a fire, somebody’s liar.
It’s ironic you get burned when a match can end it.

The first bar here is FIRE! The second bar closes this piece out nicely.


Man, your flow was on point throughout, great use of vocab, multi's, imagery, and emotion. Some deep stuff in some spots, but doesnt get too deep for any reader to appreciate, I think. This is done really nicely man. Great work here! Hope this doesnt get slept on!

[MonuMental]

Here's what it is, bruh:

Too unsure to move but too frightened to stand still.
When it beats this fast my heart's quite a handful.
I speak out a landfill. It's not as hard as it seems,
Like in my dreams as I see me, I speak so free and easy.

Yeah, the flow is seamless. Last line was deffo relatable. Nice opener.

But the reality, to me, feels more like a nightmare,
I talk to myself as if somebody might care.
The truth is right there on the tip of my tounge.
The chance is slim to none that my confidence will fight fair.

First bar took the cake, in my opinion. Second one followed up nicely, but I'm really diggin the other.

And speaking of chances I know I need to take more.
This oak needs to take form but I'm still just an acorn.
My childish fears . . . of rejection are effecting
How I choose to make a move. That’s ineffective affection.

These two just snapped. Like the imagery with the "oak" and "acorn" thrown in there. Nicely done.

My ego is shattered by my Id in self dominance.
My heart is not a lobbyist and I wonder how obvious
It is I'm scared shitless of the opposite sex.
Witness the skittish slip the only odds that he gets.

Again with the immaculate flow you got going on. Multies are hitting nicely, as well.

Not ready, the sweat beads my head and two palms,
Trying in futility to sound cool and calm.
But I’m too far gone and this true heart’s longing
For a chance at romance and a new start bonding.

Last bar was super sick. I can feel that, bruh.

Would I even know what to do with it if I got it,
If I had you in my pocket or you had me in a locket.
I could draw a picture, perfect. Take my pic insert it
But make a different person, the one that isn’t worthless.

Getting deeper emotionally, here. Showing the different sides of one problem.

Shake down the problems that restrain me in bondage.
Make out with optics and name your accomplice
It’s a shame how I’m honest, a shame how you’re not then.
A game to admonish my favorite responses.

I know I'm being redundant, but I gotta bring up the flow again. Sick right here, man.

History is a mystery to me, the past is present.
Can’t see the future or chase that incentive.
Love is a fire, somebody’s liar.
It’s ironic you get burned when a match can end it.

Pretty appropriate closer, it helped to seal the deal nicely on this piece.



I like how you painted an accurate picture of a completely understandable issue that many people face. I dig real content and concepts. Nicely done, bruh.

[Kau the Lion]

Thanks for the nice breakdown, guys. Uppin for more feed.

[KING RUM12]

I like this piece ...the words seem to have a lot of feeling...

this i feel was a lot more interesting then other bars

But the reality, to me, feels more like a nightmare,
I talk to myself as if somebody might care.
The truth is right there on the tip of my tounge.
The chance is slim to none that my confidence will fight fair.

[Quix]

Shake down the problems that restrain me in bondage.
Make out with optics and name your accomplice
It’s a shame how I’m honest, a shame how you’re not then.
A game to admonish my favorite responses

My favorite part.


This shit had flows and multis galore!! great Read Kau.


uppin

[JDR]

Nice drop. You went Kid Cudi on us or something...Grimey with emotion.

Favorite part is

But the reality, to me, feels more like a nightmare,
I talk to myself as if somebody might care.
The truth is right there on the tip of my tounge.
The chance is slim to none that my confidence will fight fair.

Really deep and the flow was nice.

[Kau the Lion]

Thanks for the feed. Uppin.

[Glamtrash]

Novel choice of topic dude. Relatable, and written almost flawlessly.

Shake down the problems that restrain me in bondage.
Make out with optics and name your accomplice
It’s a shame how I’m honest, a shame how you’re not then.
A game to admonish my favorite responses

^<3 lol.

Good shit dude.

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[COMPUTERCHIPS]

This was felt on a personal level i can relate.
i see the strong emotion all over.
the flow i think just comes natural, none the less shit was impeccable. Nicely done.

[Kau the Lion]

Glam, I think that was best stanza pesonally, from a technical and content standpint. I'd like to point out that this was a piece I started years ago and forgot about. I just opened it up and decided to finish it recently. So, maybe you can see the multiple perspectives and ideas present here. I tried to polish up the older parts so hopefully they match the skill level of the newer parts. Appreciate all the positive feed on this one. Uppin.

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[Haz]

Would I even know what to do with it if I got it,
If I had you in my pocket or you had me in a locket.
I could draw a picture, perfect. Take my pic insert it
But make a different person, the one that isn’t worthless.


My favorite part ..

To me .. This was a Poem, It could of been a Spoken word..
this was neat man, Different.. I like it

Keep dropping

[Jsteel]

This was nice,a lot of people can relate to what you talking about and connect with it,flow was tIght and. Good multIes, ill piece that I enjoyed thoroughly ,keep up that. G,its deep...

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[Kau the Lion]

Thanks for the feed, guys.