spartan practice

[CBK]

My name is Dilios, and this is my chance to say what happened that day in the battle of Thermopylae,


We marched, into hell we marched,well armed, our 3 hundred spartan hardened hearts, armoured from the start,
since birth we trained in arms, an weapons practice, how to tame pain, remain calm, never panic an defensive tactics.
the strength to deliver extensive damage,an preventing hazards,service to Sparta in life or death is the only existing thing that ever mattered.
we set formation at the head of the pass an witnessed the dreaded at last,steadfast, not a shred of a gasp, a million men had amassed there,then as it crept up our backs together we erupted in laughter.never retreat never surrender spartan code is forever remembered, as the million descended not a single fearful word was mentioned from us 300 herculean descendants.
all i can tell to you express or explain to you
is that we did what we were born to do,what we were bred to do an what we were trained to do.
as i lay beside my brave king an died i engraved on the side as a permanent marker to make aware of us martyrs,
at the head of the hot gates theirs a sign that belies
that here by spartan law we lie.

[MonuMental]

I don't mind being the first to say that you did this up nicely. IMO, you effectively delivered what your title spoke upon. The lyrics were tight and the content was full of nice imagery. There's the structure complaint, but I found my way through it cleanly enough. Keep writing, bruh, I'm watching you get better all the time.

[Quix]

We marched, into hell we marched,well armed, our 3 hundred spartan hardened hearts, armoured from the start,
since birth we trained in arms, an weapons practice, how to tame pain, remain calm, never panic an defensive tactics


liked the flow on this line here ^



Overall pretty nice CBK. i agree with Monu, liked the way you put this piece together with the imagery..good shit

[JDR]

Decent drop and def one of my favorite topics. Flow was decent for the most part. Nothing to complex but you dont need to many tricks in a drop like this so nicely done.

[FatalX]

I liked this...I found my way through it fine and I think that it was pretty on point as far as from a to b....nothing that WOW'd me but respectable