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Niggaz Wanna "Pop Off At Hazard" Thinkin i Wont Twist Ya Lid "Ova Dose"
Like Death R.I.P This Kid Know i Got My Grill Up Call it Da "Rova-Post"/
i'll Shower in Ether Like Hovas Flow Cause im Fire Hold-Ya-Smoke
Injectin Sick in Ya Vainz Brainz Mold Da Dope Addicted Wit Taken Shots/
Leave Ya Eyes Avicted "Escapin-Spots" Face Laced in Hott Like Shoe Fronts
Sliced Up in Back Like Who Front? Gettin a Red image Have U Blue Punk/
Claimin Hazard Not Sick? Take Me To E.R. is He Mentally Challenged Or a Retard
Debree Scars Across Ya Teeth Part Swallowin Hott Puffs Jump When u Breathe Hard/
i Wont "Ovadose" On ya Fakeness Like Publicity Stunts.. No Way i'll Stop Like Aids How U Gittin Me Punk/
"COCK BACK" Heat Cha "Ass Up" Sick Wit Spit Den i "Feva-Rap-Up" Like "Ganaria-Splat-Nuts
U Ain Gettin far Simila To No Semen Minus Viagra Ripp This Big Pussy Up Like Lined in Vagina/
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Post by Mac »

This Is Actually A little Better Then Ya Other Shit, You Had Lines That Actually Made Sense, I Still Didn't Understand Alot Of It. lol. But Over All Nice piece, Keep Droppin Man, You'll Get it. Or People Will Learn To Understand Your Ass.
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[align=center]i'll Shower in Ether Like Hovas Flow Cause im Fire Hold-Ya-Smoke

^^ .. i Liked That Hova Shit ..
i Thought it Was Good ..
it actually Made Sense ..
But U Shoulda Said ..
"U`ll Shower in Ether Like Hovas Flow" ..
Why Would U Wanna Shower in Sumptin` That`ll Fuck ya Skin Up ??..

Juss Start Wordin` Shit Better ..
& Keep Postin` So U Can Work On it More ..
Get More Complex ..
Quit Tryna Make So Many Multies ..
`cus U Put So Many ..
& it Doesn`t Make Sense ..
if U Cut it Down ..
U`ll Get Better Wit Makin` Sense ..

Overall - it Was a Solid Diss i Guess ..
Juss Work On Wat i Juss Told U ..
Also Quick Tryin` to Make ya Multies Rhyme Wit Tha Punchline ..
U Not That Complex Yet ..
U Try That .. & it also Doesn`t Make Sense ..[/align]
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.. it`s S.a.W Bitches ..
.. Niggas ain't Fuckin Wit Tha Team ..

JayGUNNa
RELL FiaSCO

aRViNCiBLE
SCiP
MiiLZ

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Post by -TraMaTiK- »

-.RELL.FiaSCO.- wrote:[align=center]i'll Shower in Ether Like Hovas Flow Cause im Fire Hold-Ya-Smoke

^^ .. i Liked That Hova Shit ..
i Thought it Was Good ..
it actually Made Sense ..
But U Shoulda Said ..
"U`ll Shower in Ether Like Hovas Flow" ..
Why Would U Wanna Shower in Sumptin` That`ll Fuck ya Skin Up ??..

Juss Start Wordin` Shit Better ..
& Keep Postin` So U Can Work On it More ..
Get More Complex ..
Quit Tryna Make So Many Multies ..
`cus U Put So Many ..
& it Doesn`t Make Sense ..
if U Cut it Down ..
U`ll Get Better Wit Makin` Sense ..

Overall - it Was a Solid Diss i Guess ..
Juss Work On Wat i Juss Told U ..
Also Quick Tryin` to Make ya Multies Rhyme Wit Tha Punchline ..
U Not That Complex Yet ..
U Try That .. & it also Doesn`t Make Sense ..[/align]
i was gonna say somethin along the lines of that^^ BUT since rell finna be a asshole n take my advice..lmfao naw j/p but ye hazard stop tryna force multis only use them when u no there gonna make sense..now i undastand u think they did but as u see we dont undastand most of em and rell pointed one out already....either explain the multis or try and make them make sense..-1-
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Post by Haz »

"Shower in Ether" ... Cause im Fire Kiiid
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Post by |.R.SON.aLL.| »

Ether is an acid That Makes ya Skin Burn ..
it Still Woulda Been Better if U Said it How i Worded it ..
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.. it`s S.a.W Bitches ..
.. Niggas ain't Fuckin Wit Tha Team ..

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SCiP
MiiLZ

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Post by Viral »

good verse man..i liked it....im takin it that ova dose part is a diss to him?....oh well...it was overall pretty solid...i notice u drop alotta short verses..id really like to see longer verses from ya....possibly wit some kick ass content, instead of always ima whip ur ass till ur some shit in grass type rhymes..not that its bad...its all good i do that shit too..but i think ud do good at it......good drop...stay up....do wat u do
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Post by LadieHazard »

Ya shits Hott i tell u all the time lol <3
Think iM Trippin? Tie Ma Shoe...
Cant Stand me? Sit the fuck Down...
Cant Face me? Then Turn the Fuck around...

u Cant Break The Bitch That Thinkz Nothin Of u!
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Post by Mac »

You Have To ^^..lol
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Post by Kurse »

Gotta give props where they're due. Shit was good lyrics. I'd have to say my favorite part was the

"Niggaz Wanna "Pop Off At Hazard" Thinkin i Wont Twist Ya Lid "Ova Dose"
Like Death R.I.P This Kid Know i Got My Grill Up Call it Da "Rova-Post"

...shit was hot. Strong start...i like dat.
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Post by Haz »

Thanks For Tha Feed Back Kurse Viral
lol i'll Do Dat i Get Whadd Ur Sayin ..
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Post by complexity »

Hazard. You have got an unbelievable amount of detailed advice from Killah & Myself. Yet you don't take it. So I doubt you will take his.

Anyway. Overall not that horrible. Honestly though. I guess I shouldn't read your verses. Apparently I'm not ghetto enough to understand them :(
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Post by Tha Kulprit »

nice drop tho, keep doin it, work on those metas and elevate yourself..

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Aiight Homie Good Lookin
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