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KING RUM12
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The Warm up...

Post by KING RUM12 »

:twisted: 3 losses! i need to ReMaIn CaLm...
even if i think these LaMeZ wRonG...
fuck rookies i need vets to BaNg oN
before I'm elevated to cHanGe FoRm...

I was crowned to wAgE wAr...with guns n RaGed sWords to
put rappers under PAveD FlOoRs with battlers n RaPeD WhOrEs...
respect King or i'll make u PrAy LoRd coz battlin me is like playin the saw game on StAgE 4....


show u wut I use GrenAdes fOR...when I move BrIgAdeS fOrWarD
my bombs ill knock you out of H4's...u guys give me the cHuCkLeS...
more then gAy CouPLes ...I shud take 100% of ur HuStLE and if u defy me! im pulling teeth out of my KnUcKles....ur rhymes SupPLe...

leave u DiSaBleD for uttering FaBLes
-_sarcastically speaking_-

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Re: The Warm up...

Post by Glamtrash »

Quite an abrupt ending, don't we think? Lol and I'm really not a fan of your presentation, at all. But as far as the writing goes, it's not terrible. Work out the little shit, and keep em comin.

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Re: The Warm up...

Post by KING RUM12 »

yah.....its the warm up...
-_sarcastically speaking_-

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Re: The Warm up...

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I can read lol. I assumed in putting it here you wanted feedback. That's mine lol.

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leeroi green
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Re: The Warm up...

Post by leeroi green »

haha well i liked it pretty decent for an exersise
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Re: The Warm up...

Post by Blake Downs »

this shit was ight,not bad,could use a lil bit of work
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