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probablyTreed
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thoughts of a drunken me

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Tree man still,
tree house of horror,
i write like im an author, im an artist
and theyll prolly never find me,
cuz im so bright its blinding,
always been an ugly duckling so i swan dive into escapes,
but that wont earn me estates,
why must my soul be at stake?
i just wanna be great, not a wanna be..
what am i gonna be?
not evil hopefully
cuz thats what my opponents be,
thoughts of a drunken me...

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http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/got-a ... ml#p184867
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Re: thoughts of a drunken me

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This flowed pretty smooth for just a lil excerpt. Even though it was short it was cool. Nothin to correct, really, you're doin you. Stay up, ya drunk mofo.
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Re: thoughts of a drunken me

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Word. Btw, that was your 420th post :D
Meant to be?
Probably...
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Re: thoughts of a drunken me

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This was alright for what it was. Not much there to really review but there were a couple of real good bars like:

and theyll prolly never find me,
cuz im so bright its blinding,
always been an ugly duckling so i swan dive into escapes,
but that wont earn me estates,
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AKA SCOTCH HALL, MOE MEIJER & MOMEIJAH.
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