Sporadic vs. Prophet

[Prophet]

5 Bars
House Rules
Due 24 hrs (would like to wrap this up quick though)
G/L

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[Sporadic]

ite, im checkin in!

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[Prophet]

I saw his battle with Quix y'all, Spor's dick talk was piss poor to puut
Ironic, if your flossin' your content, I wouldn't say this Dick's sportin' good

Ignore? You could, it wouldn't be wise/"Why's", you don't have the skills dog to "Make it" with
"SP" thinks he has bars, till I bring the locks/LOX and show him who's the real boss like Jadakiss

But I'm not Jada, I have Will dog you Jayden Smith, this a place you won't hack it in
The fact of this, even though you'll take L's often, I have a feelin' we'll see 'Sporadic wins'

After a few battles we'll check your averages, or I'll 'leave' you behind and this brother's in the dust
I saw your excuse, its not botany dude, its biology proved, Spore's not recovering from rust

You have game? Your last battle proved you lame, you were layed way beneath to rest
No question, If I gave you two a grade, I'd give Q an A/Q&A, and P the F/PDF when he read my text

[Sporadic]

'Il School Proff/Proph' You Disrespect 'Principal/Principle SP' Or Ditch Classes, You A Dead Bastard
You Cheating Test Answer, You Got Nothin To Teach Ama 'Principle' But You Just A 'Head-Master/Headmaster'

33 Defeats? It Aint Easy To Top It, 'Prophecies' Say Life Wont Be Easy For Prophet U Aint Makin 'Profits
You Got The Cheapest Of Pockets', Il Become The Most Recent Since MesaR To Add To Prophs 'Sequence' Of Losses

4 Years N U Still Aint Made An Impact, Infact Carry My Weight Ul Get Shin Splints Till Ya Shins Crack
Im The 'Spor-tin' Type? Get Ya Shin Pads, Ya Shits Wack Ma Shits 'Fab', Afta This He'll Have '1 Wish', That He Never Got Hit Like 'Kims(kardashian) Ass'

If 3's The Magic Number.. U Must Be Feelin Double Lucky(his losses) Alot To Watch Hes Lost(tv show) Its A Shame
'Pro's A Rookie' Broke, Like 'G-Unit' Hes Got 'No Bucks/Buck(youngbuck)' And Lost His 'Game'

You Aint A Boss, You Shook B Spittin 'Crooked I/Eyes' Flow But My Punchlines Will Make U Spit Crooked Teeth
Like 'Ricks Birth' Ima Rip This Bitch Worse Thans (rick)Rosses Moms Pussy (At Birth)



*EDITED: GOT ON COMPUTER AND CORRECTED THE STRUCTURES. if anyone has objections pleas let me know, this was suppost to be the original structure but my fones wack and could comprehend this loool

[Quix]

saw his battle with Quix y'all, Spor's dick talk was piss poor to puut
Ironic, if your flossin' your content, I wouldn't say this Dick's sportin' good

very bland, no punch choppy sounding. Good attempt at a personal but no 1/5

Ignore? You could, it wouldn't be wise/"Why's", you don't have the skills dog to "Make it" with
"SP" thinks he has bars, till I bring the locks/LOX and show him who's the real boss like Jadakiss

this could have soo much better had you worded it better. Came of very choppy. 2/5

But I'm not Jada, I have Will dog you Jayden Smith, this a place you won't hack it in
The fact of this, even though you'll take L's often, I have a feelin' we'll see 'Sporadic wins'

hmm, seems like you just complimented him, at least thats how it sounded for me. thats a battle NO NO!! 0.5/5


After a few battles we'll check your averages, or I'll 'leave' you behind and this brother's in the dust
I saw your excuse, its not botany dude, its biology proved, Spore's not recovering from rust

meh not bad, flowed a bit better too. 2.5/5

You have game? Your last battle proved you lame, you were layed way beneath to rest
No question, If I gave you two a grade, I'd give Q an A/Q&A, and P the F/PDF when he read my text

i'm crossed on this bar...normally you don't want to bring other emcees into your battle...but dude this was by far your best BAR!! good shit right here, could have had better flow and maybe another minor punch but good shit

3.5/5


9/25


'Il School Proff/Proph' You disrespect 'Principles/Principle SP' Or Ditch Classes, You A Dead Bastard You Cheating Test Answer, You Got Nothin To Teach Ama 'Principle' But You Just A 'Head-Master/Headmaster' ↲

Good multies, good direct concept, on the basic side but effective. 3/5

33 Defeats? It Aint Easy To Top It, 'Prophecies' Say Life Wont Be Easy For Prophet U Aint Makin 'Prophets You Got The Cheapest Of Pockets', Il Become The Most Recent Since MesaR To Add To Prophs 'Sequence' Of Losses ↲

Wasn't feeling this bar ... flow was allright though. somewhat of a persoanl. 2/5

4 Years N U Still Aint Made An Impact, Infact Carry My Weight Ul Get Shin Splints Till Ya Shins Crack Im The 'Spor-tin' Type? Get Ya Shin Pads, Ya Shits Wack Ma Shits 'Fab', Afta This He'll Have '1 Wish', That He Never Got Hit Like 'Kims(kardashian) Ass' ↲

Hahaha, decent bar right here. I liked it though. Decent punch, nice flow. 3/5

If 3's The Magic Number.. U Must Be Feelin Double Lucky(his losses) Alot To Watch Hes Lost(tv show) Its A Shame 'Pro's A Rookie' Broke, Like 'G-Unit' Hes Got 'No Bucks/Buck(youngbuck)' And Lost His 'Game' ↲

meh, sort of a strech on the concept here. not bad though 2.5/5

You Aint A Boss, You Shook B Spittin 'Crooked I/Eyes' Flow But My Punchlines Will Make U Spit Crooked Teeth Like 'Ricks Birth' Ima Rip This Bitch Worse Thans (rick)Rosses Moms Pussy (At Birth)

Not the best closer, rather random punch. very general could've have been directed at anyone at anytime.

2.5/5

13/25


Overall: SPor gets it


Punches: SPor
flow: Spor
Personals: Tie
Nameplay: Tie
Creativity: Spor
Enjoyment: Spor
Originialty: Tie
Overall: Spor

[Mic S]

I saw his battle with Quix y'all, Spor's dick talk was piss poor to puut
Ironic, if your flossin' your content, I wouldn't say this Dick's sportin' good
lol nice personal, cool wordplay - punch hit, but rhyme scheme seemed forced
Ignore? You could, it wouldn't be wise/"Why's", you don't have the skills dog to "Make it" with
"SP" thinks he has bars, till I bring the locks/LOX and show him who's the real boss like Jadakiss
wordplay was there but punch didnt do much for me
But I'm not Jada, I have Will dog you Jayden Smith, this a place you won't hack it in
The fact of this, even though you'll take L's often, I have a feelin' we'll see 'Sporadic wins'
cool wordplay. nice personal - cool punch
After a few battles we'll check your averages, or I'll 'leave' you behind and this brother's in the dust
I saw your excuse, its not botany dude, its biology proved, Spore's not recovering from rust
ehh i liked your concept, just wasn't feelin the punch
You have game? Your last battle proved you lame, you were layed way beneath to rest
No question, If I gave you two a grade, I'd give Q an A/Q&A, and P the F/PDF when he read my text
again good concept, just way forced, so didnt hit like it should've if it hit at all

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'Il School Proff/Proph' You Disrespect 'Principles/Principle SP' Or Ditch Classes, You A Dead Bastard
You Cheating Test Answer, You Got Nothin To Teach Ama 'Principle' But You Just A 'Head-Master/Headmaster'
cool concept - just didnt feel it hit like it should have, personal in beginnin was ight too
33 Defeats? It Aint Easy To Top It, 'Prophecies' Say Life Wont Be Easy For Prophet U Aint Makin 'Prophets
You Got The Cheapest Of Pockets', Il Become The Most Recent Since MesaR To Add To Prophs 'Sequence' Of Losses ↲
i see ya tryin get personal - just didnt hit
4 Years N U Still Aint Made An Impact, Infact Carry My Weight Ul Get Shin Splints Till Ya Shins Crack Im The 'Spor-tin' Type? Get Ya Shin Pads
Ya Shits Wack Ma Shits 'Fab', Afta This He'll Have '1 Wish', That He Never Got Hit Like 'Kims(kardashian) Ass' ↲
stretched but funny - i like this punch haha
If 3's The Magic Number.. U Must Be Feelin Double Lucky(his losses) Alot To Watch Hes Lost(tv show) Its A Shame
'Pro's A Rookie' Broke, Like 'G-Unit' Hes Got 'No Bucks/Buck(youngbuck)' And Lost His 'Game' ↲
lol cool personal as it started - nd nice wordplay - i like this
You Aint A Boss, You Shook B Spittin 'Crooked I/Eyes' Flow But My Punchlines Will Make U Spit Crooked Teeth
Like 'Ricks Birth' Ima Rip This Bitch Worse Thans (rick)Rosses Moms Pussy (At Birth)
ehh it was ok

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alright first verse was cool - just didnt have the sting - punches and wordplay could use more of a closer
as for that it will all come with battling more
the 2nd verse - had some wittier ideas - wordplay was there but sometimes just didnt connect as a punch.. could work on that

both came good enough to make this battle sort of good

but for reasons and enjoyment, coming wittier, having more creative punchlines
my vote goes to spor..

[JDR]

prophet - decent verse. Some filler and a weak bar or two but overall nice. First bar was strong but last bar messed me up

sporadic - i was confused reading your verse. The in bar expos really messed the whole flow up trying to read it. Some decent lines and nice personals.

Vote - prophet

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[Kau the Lion]

Sporadics flow was hard to catch with the expos. You need to structure your verse for easier reading. Overall though, I thought Prophet's punches were a lot more creative and hit harder. They were more personal, too.

+1 Prophet

PS: Sporadic, schools have Principals. Men have principles. When you make money you profit. Prophets tell prophecies. It was hard to get your wordplay at first because I had to re-read it to know which was which since you didn't change the spelling.

Edited at Sporadic's request.

Cats:

Punches: Prophet
flow: Tie
Personals: Prophet
Nameplay: Tie
Creativity: Prophet
Enjoyment: Prophet
Originialty: Tie
Overall: Prophet

[Komatose]

Pretty Good Battle Both Had Some Good Lines Decent Flips Here Is My Breakdown.


Flow-Tie
Punches-Hmmm Pretty Close. Tie.
Multies-Sporadic
Personals-Tie
Nameplay-Sporadic
Wordplay-Tie
Complexity-Neither Had Nothing Incredibly Dope. Tie.
Creativity-Both Had Some Creative Points In There Verses Tie
Originality-Tie
Enjoyment/Entertainment-Tie Again This Was A Close Battle.
Format/Structure-Tie Both Were Readable



OverAll Vote-I Believe Sporadic Edges This Battle With Just A Bit Better Content An Consistent Verse Both Were Good Though Props An Respect To Both I Keep My Votes 100% Fair & Both Of You Should Join My Crew ArchiText Penmanship Go Check In Here

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[Mic S]

ite thanks can u 2 use the cats to vote and then that'll 2-2 and yh silly spellin mistakes, thatll help in the next battle thanks and the structure is cuz of my fone. It sucks lol

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-- Sun Oct 30, 2011 5:06 pm --

bumpin fa votes

no offense i dont usually do the whole cats thing.. so my vote will still count.. i mean its a proper bar 2 bar breakdown with an explanation

[Concise]

Second battle on here I've read, first one I've voted on. Here's how I seen it:

I usually break down the bars an explain my vote more so than use cats. but I guess if you want cats I'll just break it down that way w/o a long detailed expo. lol

Punches: close...but Sporadic edged
flow: tie
Personals: Prophet..he had more all through out his verse
Nameplay: tie
Creativity: again close, but I think Sporadic took it
Enjoyment: tie
Originality: tie
Overall: Prophet

At first read..I thought Sporadic took it..but as I read it again I think I felt Prophet's verse more. The Kim K line was kinda weak in my opinion..cause I was expecting a better harder hitting punch to be where that line was. That line and the last line kinda fell off for me, if those were replaced with better punches I think you would have edged. Some of Prophets lines came off kinda simple-ish to me but it was enough to edge.

[Alvin]

BUMPING FOR VOTES

[ILLoKWENT]

gotta go wit prophet on this one, im not too experienced in text battling but from what i seen, i really didnt dig the explanation that was stuck in between the lines, made the line feel overly long, and confusing, i think that maybe a good idea would be to put the expo maybe somewhere else so you verse would look cleaner to read....sporadic, as far as punches go, you came ok, and your last line probably was the cleverest...

proph, your verse was easier on the eyes, hence got the disses across nicer imo....

my vote proph..

good battle to both

[GhoStWriDa001]

I saw his battle with Quix y'all, Spor's dick talk was piss poor to puut
Ironic, if your flossin' your content, I wouldn't say this Dick's sportin' good

^ Nice opener..

Ignore? You could, it wouldn't be wise/"Why's", you don't have the skills dog to "Make it" with
"SP" thinks he has bars, till I bring the locks/LOX and show him who's the real boss like Jadakiss

^ Okay good multis and worplay..

But I'm not Jada, I have Will dog you Jayden Smith, this a place you won't hack it in
The fact of this, even though you'll take L's often, I have a feelin' we'll see 'Sporadic wins'

^ Good hit..

After a few battles we'll check your averages, or I'll 'leave' you behind and this brother's in the dust
I saw your excuse, its not botany dude, its biology proved, Spore's not recovering from rust

^ haha.. pretty good hit again

You have game? Your last battle proved you lame, you were layed way beneath to rest
No question, If I gave you two a grade, I'd give Q an A/Q&A, and P the F/PDF when he read my text

^ This line is what gets me.. its aight but Rugged Eros said the "Q an A" thing before when he battled Quix

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-- Sun Nov 13, 2011 3:52 pm --

'Il School Proff/Proph' You Disrespect 'Principal/Principle SP' Or Ditch Classes, You A Dead Bastard
You Cheating Test Answer, You Got Nothin To Teach Ama 'Principle' But You Just A 'Head-Master/Headmaster'

^ Didnt get this opener

33 Defeats? It Aint Easy To Top It, 'Prophecies' Say Life Wont Be Easy For Prophet U Aint Makin 'Profits
You Got The Cheapest Of Pockets', Il Become The Most Recent Since MesaR To Add To Prophs 'Sequence' Of Losses

^ A little more personal.. pretty good

4 Years N U Still Aint Made An Impact, Infact Carry My Weight Ul Get Shin Splints Till Ya Shins Crack

No punch, filler smh..

Im The 'Spor-tin' Type? Get Ya Shin Pads, Ya Shits Wack Ma Shits 'Fab', Afta This He'll Have '1 Wish', That He Never Got Hit Like 'Kims(kardashian) Ass'

^ No..

If 3's The Magic Number.. U Must Be Feelin Double Lucky(his losses) Alot To Watch Hes Lost(tv show) Its A Shame ^ Even though Proff is bland, I still dont get whats the punch..

'Pro's A Rookie' Broke, Like 'G-Unit' Hes Got 'No Bucks/Buck(youngbuck)' And Lost His 'Game'

^ Makes sense, alright
no personal.

You Aint A Boss, You Shook B Spittin 'Crooked I/Eyes' Flow But My Punchlines Will Make U Spit Crooked Teeth

^ Ok haha..

Like 'Ricks Birth' Ima Rip This Bitch Worse Thans (rick)Rosses Moms Pussy (At Birth)

^ Ok finisher

*EDITED: GOT ON COMPUTER AND CORRECTED THE STRUCTURES. if anyone has objections pleas let me know, this was suppost to be the original structure but my fones wack and could comprehend this loool

-- Sun Nov 13, 2011 4:15 pm --

Overall: My vote is Prophet

[Quix]

ok i think Proph won this