this is the first song i ever recorded
under the alias Kunfucius
its called adrenaline
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just to show how much i've improved
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Re: my first song ever
see, i kinda like this defiance better.
your delivery could use work at that time obviously but, the tone that you were holding, i think fits you better. better than that grungy feel your goin for now. this laid back, smoother sounding flow i think can do you good if you mix it in to your delivery.
youve definately come a ways from then so, good job man. always improving is the name of the game sir. way to go
your delivery could use work at that time obviously but, the tone that you were holding, i think fits you better. better than that grungy feel your goin for now. this laid back, smoother sounding flow i think can do you good if you mix it in to your delivery.
youve definately come a ways from then so, good job man. always improving is the name of the game sir. way to go
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Re: my first song ever
lol yeah this isnt the song i meant to drop.. this is like 2006
this is the first song i recorded under modern defiance
this is the first song i recorded under modern defiance


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Re: my first song ever
well tbh honest Modern i like ya new style better..this is a lil too monotone...imo..you held some real good swag tho
and started to get in better after the first minute..
and started to get in better after the first minute..
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Re: my first song ever
lyrics are aight... seems like your a little relax maybe a little too much... i think you could have thrown a little more attitude and swag to it... but it's straight none the less
beat is nice good choice
juss kinda hard to hear a word your saying... could juss be the mixin quality...
not bad for the first song keep it up bro and hope to hear more from ya as you get better
beat is nice good choice
juss kinda hard to hear a word your saying... could juss be the mixin quality...
not bad for the first song keep it up bro and hope to hear more from ya as you get better
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Re: my first song ever
this is aiight for a first ever track im still yet to record one so id say this id dope.
ya new stuff better tho obv.but Loon e has a point the delivery tone in this was doper than yours now imo.
ya new stuff better tho obv.but Loon e has a point the delivery tone in this was doper than yours now imo.
Re: my first song ever
I like the beat ... it's gotta gritty feel to it ... and if this if your first song I think you've gotta ton of potential because even though there are a couple spots where your writing can't mirror your intentions ... there are a lot more things that sound really smooth and click together well. The other thing I'm really diggin is that you don't really sound like anything else that I'm familiar with and that a huge victory in itself.
So ... definitely stick with it ... keep being you ... and make sure to spit it a ton of times before recording ... you started off stronger probably because you had more practice there ... it almost sounds like you're freestylin' at the end ... which if you are ... nice .. if not ... it needs more polish .... This is good shit ..Thumbs up!
So ... definitely stick with it ... keep being you ... and make sure to spit it a ton of times before recording ... you started off stronger probably because you had more practice there ... it almost sounds like you're freestylin' at the end ... which if you are ... nice .. if not ... it needs more polish .... This is good shit ..Thumbs up!

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Re: my first song ever
this was fucking garbage.... nah jk it was pretty good considering its your first song, makes my first song look like shit easily lol
i think your presence could've had more umph, just a bit more, style was smooth though
i think your presence could've had more umph, just a bit more, style was smooth though

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Re: my first song ever
yeah this is a freestyle whole thing.. i use to freestyle all my recordings so chea
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thanks for the feed guys


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