YES!!!

[Kuhlerblynd]

ANYONE THAT FEEDS THIS AND WOULD LIKE ME TO RETURN THE FAVOR, I WILL GLADLY DO IT. JUST LEAVE A LINK OR LINKS TO THE PIECES YOU WOULD LIKE SOME FEEDBACK ON, AND I WILL GET TO EVERY ONE OF THEM! THANKS!

(( Just to let it be known, this is a bit 'scattered', as I like to say, but I'm just trying to fine tune some things when it comes to flow and delivery, more than anything. I would really appreciate any constructive feedback regardless, though. ))

Alright, let's get to it...


Return at the pinnacle, a general, words so physical
They rip a hole so deep it's like a constant menstral flow
I'm exempt to hoes, my principle is to be principal
The class act in the show that'll quickly end it, though
On a level so spiritual, you'll be prayin' to Gods
Saying it's hard to display in your heart the pain and the scars
That take it so far it's like when a train hits a car
Enflamed from the sparks where future graves get a mark
I'm at the base of what's dark, born of the Heavens of Hell
Sins of seven that swell until at least eleven's retail
And you buy cuz I yell it's for sale to the customer
Your fucking dome can get busted for a rusted turd
Man, you fucking heard, your teeth will touch the curb
Kicked in until nothing squirts but blood and dirt
I'm doper than blunts you burn, you fuckin' Smurf
Plantin' bombs at football games, 'come bust' your turf
Emcees like these trust theit worst, I'm hittin' all in
So busy boxin', no amount of Remy Martin can get me off it
Ya'll seem to miss me often, so we fixed the coffins
For when you really fall in, death by Kenny Wallen
Metaphors which split the toxins in your mother's mind
Til she wishes her first birth in line was Kuhlerblynd
So she'd do without a troubled life, a quick fix to this bitch
Knowing I'm the fuckin future, and you simply didn't exist...

[Defiance]

lol a lil shit talking piece the turd line made me laugh out loud.

i was like damn man.. not as good as the other piece by far.. had a solid flow


could of been more directional with it.. but pieces like this are always fun and fast to write so i can dig it


fav line
And you buy cuz I yell it's for sale to the customer
Your fucking dome can get busted for a rusted turd

[Shawnmd]

The rusted turd lines just nasty lol. Nice punches and multies.

[88SkyLink]

This was a dope drop from you man. I liked how you went with the abab structure on the first four line and then went with the rhymin couplet afterwards. You had some nice punches and multis, although they were randomly put IMO, but I don't see any flaws within this post, so a good drop ...

-- Sun Oct 02, 2011 4:57 am --

and btw, if u really want to comment on a drop, check my piece out ...

http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/88sky ... 23320.html