Release your best recorded material and let the world hear your talent. It doesn't matter what level you are on - you will get constructive feedback to increase your skills.
I like the style in this, its "cocky". Atleast the bigining was, about 2/3 into the first rap part before the breakdown... and here and there, you went into straight read mode. I can hear your "p"s more than i should, and your "wow" is stupid loud. Whys the beat and vocals drop out around 1:26?