feedback please...might be called..Hustle aint you

[Felon]

Social misfit, uncontrolable thoughts and feelings
I was born for killing and awkward dealings
I live life on the edge, my mind never rests
Never liking the feds, turn a blind eye to there deaths
Cus i...do what i do to get through shit
Smoke til my minds at rest then roll a new spliff
Forget about the past and i'll keep moving ahead
I'm used to the stress or i'd be losing my head
So i got my head screwed on like frankenstein (Might change to...But my fucking heads screwed like frankenstein)
As i... hustle and graft with these hands of mine (So i.. hustle and graft with these hands of mine)
Where i.... choose my own path to lead (Cus i.. choose my own path to lead)
I got nothing to lose where my scars are deep (Where i got nothing to lose where my scars are deep)
So i got..... shit to show for myself (and now i got shit to show for myself)
Dignity, respect....a little hope in this world
So i will make it work with the time which i have
Cus its only me who holds my life in my hands!!

Hustle, hustle, hustle is all that i know
I wanna change my ways but i dont know where to go
Hustle, hustle, hustle you gotta give it a go
Cus you aint shit if you dont, YOU AINT SHIT IF YOU DONT!

Been through a lot of shit but ive dragged myself out
Now i got my feet firmly stamped in the ground
But i gotta fix my brain and start thinking straight
Know whats....right from wrong and stick that way
But FUCK THAT!! i got a synicle mind....
A criminal life... so fuck living that lie
So dont try to change me into somebody im not
Cus i dont wanna hear it so stop running ya gob!!
You can....fuck the help id rather be kicked to hell
Cus i only wish for wealth and a lil bit of health
So stop giving me greive, i'll stick as a theif
Cus its a figure of speach when people say there living there dream
So...... shit happens for a reason.....
And its a slap in the face when i start grabbing for a reason
So thats when i realised i shoulda prayed for luck
And prayed to god to change it up!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Made some changes...please give feedback.

-- Mon Sep 19, 2011 7:29 pm --

Feedback please...ima change a few lines up so it goes a bit better but could i get some other ideas?? gonna stick this to a beat soon..

-- Tue Sep 20, 2011 7:35 pm --

Damn.. can i get some feedback please?

[Felon]

Thankyou...so its obviously not ready to record..i will take this with a pinch of salt and re-do it..safe

[QwarterZ]

This was cool...well the beginning was anyway
I didn't really like the rest...the "hook" seemed simplistic
I mean it sounds like another hustling song to me
something The Game might do while trying to be lyrical
either way with a little work I believe that you might be able to come up with a decent concept
this really didn't do it for me aside from the beginning
the vibe was cool and the flow was on point
then it seemed like you lost track either way keep writing brah

[Felon]

lol...its just something i did quickly with some free time..safe for the feedback...open to more critiscm

[CBK]

felon were you from dude???