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Second Guessing

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Potential progress was left alone for profit
tryna fit in anonymous never sensed it was all thoughtless
dishonest teachers left my mind twisted and heartless
so with every curve I'm thrown I position my arm quick
to block it..or knock it out the park into the department
break down what was solidified inside the halls width
stop it...I'm just another man tryna prevail in society
but with illuminati eyin' me in every bill they provided me
I quietly under my breath, curse the sattelites in the sky I see
enemy of the state...lacking sobriety, straight lines lie to me
so everything I try to be they say I lack the aligning dream
drowning in tears...mixed with liquor softens my eyes....to sleep
and reconsider everything I been thinking picture it all rightfully
so everything inside of me..is a slight higher hand in this wack act
black jack...if I ever lack facts consider me in dire need of a backpack
so I can travel the land..unravel my hand and battle thy plans
lone traveller...don't need no one beside me to say I ain't gonna make it
oh no homey your mistaken...cuz my position will never be vacant
nothing I own is for the taken..even with every punch I been taking
I'm still here shaking...something like Ali goddamn man I'm the greatest...
never giving up a step...I just shuffle on them again waiting for containment
these flames break down the walls...so if anyone had me mistaken...
I'll never be one of y'all again...I'm just doing me...congratulations
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Re: Second Guessing

Post by Kuhlerblynd »

Multi's were sick. I wish the first couple lines matched up more with the syllable count, but otherwise, this is beautiful. Emotion is raw, imagery is there, and you stuck to topic. Its great to see you back on site, and I dont know how long it will be before you disappear again, but I hope its at least a month or two. Give us a couple more, I know you have them ready...


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Re: Second Guessing

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Damn. Some sick multies throughout. The bars got a little longer toward the end, but the flow was still there. Also, you spoke on a real ass topic. So props for that. Pretty dope drop, bruh.
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Re: Second Guessing

Post by Alvin »

Ook, this one was a much better read then the chick one. I absolutly dug the word choices and execution into rhyme schemes on this one. The flow was easy to find, and it felt pretty fluent through out the entire read. I prolly liked the first 3rd of the whole pice, the flow was just fire man. Good drop again man.
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