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the sentinel
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HOWS THIS?...need feedback on this diss

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F*CK millenium GROWS,
Chipchumk wanna bee try to rock my prolific SHOWS//
ON/OFF my electric FLOWS make ILLUMINATI torches GLOWS//
Nigga i pull stunts on necrophilic “CLIPS” to “DRIFTS” immaculate BLOWS//
“PUNCHES” melt ya “JAWS”/with ROUGH WORDS i CLIP UP CLAWS//
U could’nt get SICK if i let u clean HIV-INFECT WARD,
i got u sniffing HERDS in MUD,with verses i get u done quick//
Im so infinite DOPE and u are opposite dat (slut),
Nigga meet a combat soldier who is quick to BURST a RUST//
the frontliner of demigods crews i spew poisons FAST,
I’ll put “L” in ya face cause (coz) u are still a learner/(smh)
Mad ill is the mc’s BURNER,the gun runner while u a SWEATER//
Im ahead of my GAME like predicted SCORES,
Slicing machetes thru ya “V’s” like FOURS/(4)
and if punchlines were gifts i think mine will BLOW/(smh)
I’ll put c4 granites in ya HEAD till they explode while u FUCK shit,
With GLOCK PISTOLS i run GC, while u play G-STRING games with boys//
im such a GOOF/I’ll rip ya face upward call it (facelift)
my lines CONNECT i dnt think i need a mobile PHONE,
we niggaz in with muscles lifting HEAVY-METALs in ya ZONE//
im so damn HOT i walk on surface of tha SUN and feel its COLDness,
im DONE reaping mics check,INFANT i will destroy u likeABORTION//
cut ya tongue in MOTION, flow so fluvial than NIVEA LOTION//
in ya dome i can create more lines than salon hair dressers/bitch

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good flow, nice wordplay dis was good!
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She lied to you.... you're punches were soft... and flow was everywhere... and it was very indirect as a diss.... but it is a lil better then previous writtens from you...
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Phew! thnx,finally sumbody true.thnx 4 enlightening me!! lol

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I Thought It was Pretty Good' Just A Lil Choopy
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my only question is who taught you to flow, it feels more then a little choppy...
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Ths z a drop by someone whom i battled on fb nd apparently he won

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Post by pest »

not impressive...
the verse dosnt seem like worthy of a win.

was it on bbe? cuz that place is bullshit

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Catastropic wrote:i went to ya site on reverbnation, and i heard ya' projects bro, i must say they real damn good...
at ya' age you have a 5star skillz,
and believe you're gonna make in the music biz.
i love ya' sht...most definitely...
keep up the good work bro!
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Facebook,my reply to ths dis was this http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/feed- ... 23505.html

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