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NoVeL
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His Departure

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[video]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zG7IjDvB ... re=related[/video]

I UNDERSTAND NOW, YOU PLAYED YA ROLE, FROM THE BOTTOM TO THE TOP, CAN'T HATE IT THOUGH
THAT'S HOW YOU LIVE? LOOTIN' OFF A NIGGAS? DOIN' ME TO SURVIVE, AND YOU MOOCHIN' OFF A NIGGA?
WHEN I WAS SERVIN' BIDS YOU MINUS WELL HAVE CRACKED ME, RIGHT INSIDE MY RIBS
'BROKE A NIGGA HEART' WHEN IT'S ALL HE HAD TO GIVE
FUCK ITS TOO COSTLY, LOOK WHAT IT CAUSED ME, ENOUGH GRIEF, MUCH SLEEP AND A FROSTY
NOW YOU EATIN'.. GOOD, NOW YOU LIVIN'.. GREAT, MAKE NO MISTAKE I'LL BE BACK FOR MY DINNER PLATE
AND I'M GETTIN' MINES, I'M PRO IN COLLEGE
DADDY 'BALL' HALF THE TIME, AND HIS FLOW IS POLISHED,
SPITTIN' GOALS TO THOSE WITH HONORS WHO KNOWS HE'S HONEST
WHEN HE'S THINKIN' BOUT HIS SCHOLAR, HE HAS TO 'PATCH THE LINE'
IT'S A FACT I'M FINE, IF YOU CARED YOU WOULDA GOT OUTTA 'THE DODGE RAM'
GODDAMN
CUT SIMPLY, HOW YOU SUCK QUICKLY, AND BECOME A NIGGA HOE FOR ONLY A BUCK FIFTY
YOU CLAIM YOU DONE WIT ME, AND THINK YOUR GETTIN' CHEDDAH, ONLY THING YOU'VE EVER DONE WAS ONLY MAKE ME BETTER!
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yo man.. shit was right on the beat.. mad flow... a lil on the short side considering length of beat but you def. did your thing on this.. great written piece for audio... hit up the lab and lay this on wax man
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Re: His Departure

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nice flow, use of vocab and had heart to it , i liked it alot good job!
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Good flow and yeah I can see your emotion behind this but it seemed a bit short and try to use more vocab but other than that it's good.
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Good Flow. Hope This Will Be A Track Soon
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