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Inside Eyes (Written back on 06/07ish)

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Inside Eyes (Written back on 06/07ish)

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Inside Eyes

You've made some awful decisions so now its important you listen
I've seen the most demented of visions ever witnessed in prison
See those who pushed drugs and guns, for a little bit of thug fun
Now because of their actions they're mostly dead to their loved ones
Be bold at heart and like me, in here you've gotta be cold and hard
Otherwise these inmates will be quick to beat you and rip your soul apart
Never display a weak act, respect those with stripes, kid never speak bad
Those are the ones that could have your brain one with that concrete slab
No sh@# shall be took, and never ever let it show that you're shook
But be like me, I remain quiet only making some noise if I'm pushed
Such a horrible placement, this is where you'd say many of faiths end
I've seen a series of hate trends and the shattered spirit of raped men
Your first day in this hell, obviously scared and you're not hiding it well
Not a snitch at all but you could say in a way I am the eyes of this cell
My advice will be the best given, never let your stress give in
Your weakness will play the role of your first class death ticket
Vital facts you must remember while staying in here, for saving your rear
Never stray from being a man, because all these savages are preying on fear
The easiest part you've been through, yes times will be hard to live through
Just remain cold and hard like me, for I am the bars you grip too.
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Re: Inside Eyes (Written back on 06/07ish)

Post by Ambiguous Realm »

nice piece, 9/10

the imagery was great, kinda puts u in the story too, flow was smooth, overall a solid piece and the ending was dope
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this was really nice man, I liked the topic and how you layed it down, it had everything required, keep it up man..peace
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Re: Inside Eyes (Written back on 06/07ish)

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Dope piece, bruh. I liked the picture you painted of hell on earth. Prison turns criminals to animals.
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Re: Inside Eyes (Written back on 06/07ish)

Post by Soulo »

Damn, nice piece man it was really good...kinda felt like it fell apart a it towards the middle, but you picked it up back at the end and killed it!
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Re: Inside Eyes (Written back on 06/07ish)

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Really Dope Piece You Should' Make a 2011 Version
But Overall A Great Piece
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