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high dreams

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My room full of roaches and im rollin up a fattie,
do it in my room coz im fearless of my daddy
caught a sick buzz now im off to the college,
lookin so relaxed, like a nigga full of knowledge,
i forgot my classroom so i roll another blunt
all them Hater teacherz lookin, they know they cant front
so i walk into the toilet nd the smoke in my chest
im gettin too hot,too sweaty for my vest
so im done with the kush, im lookin for my classes,
weed got me blind, i might need glasses
im really really high so i jump into the next room
teachers wearing bright, he lookin like a brides groom
i just cant hold it so i laugh-out-loud
as i do, i cough up a really big cloud
i try to swallow it, too little too late :naughty:
now im with the principal
i bribe the mothafucker and i do it with pay pal
now he and i be blowing o’s after school,
i knw it sound bad but the shit so cool,
day after day we do it till we superhigh, :dance:
mr.principal and i can now touch the sky :whistle:
now the uniform change,we do green taylor’s
legal weed in school and the cops dont tail us,
now we got kush 101 as a subject
nd guess what! im the head of this project/ :liar:

now i wake up, t’was all a dream
now i feel like im rootin 4 the wrong team!
but i do love my weed yall
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Re: high dreams

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Story was weird bit it was supposed to be as it was a dream... good stuff flow was ok rhyme scheme could be stepped up content was ok.. keep up
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Re: high dreams

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agree with enlightened on this one

but liked the flow.. great for an audio spit


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thnx
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Re: high dreams

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it was alright. rhyming was okay but the storyline was a bit wacky and i hate anythin that ends with 'then i wake up'. try ta get the actual topic up a bit, think outside the box or sumthin and den youll hit d high notes.
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