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http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Qp_RklNtFeg (listen to this song while reading my lyrics)

(start at 0:29)
Just give me one mic, one chance, but i never got it
Always pushed around and called an idiot
Always getting hit, all alone stuck in this endless pit
Came out my moms' stomach..but don't treat me like shit
All these pussies want to front, that's when i began to spit
The things you did, i will never forget
Hate on me as much as you want but i will never quit
All my life i've been treated as dirt ever since birth
What was my life worth?
Never found an answer
Dad diagonosed with cancer
Heart started to beat slower and it seemed like time went faster
My dad trapped and enslaved, death was his master
With this, i started to believe that God didn't exist
I was pissed and wondered if cutting my wrists would bring an end to all this
I got no memories to reminisce
I see no point in life, just put on a fake smile everyday
Got nothing to say, hoping that laughing would make the pain go away
And i'm not here to talk about the fortune or fame
My heart is one beast that you can-not tame
Yet with all these problems i still live on
Even if my dad is nearly gone
He told me to stay strong
So I started rapping to this song
It helped me ease the pain
Cause you got to see through the storm...to maintain the reign
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your gonna need 2 feed 2 peoples pieces written or audio..then post ya links up in this thread or the mods might lock this up...once you do i'll give you feed on this piece homey....1
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okay this was good in my eyes...a concept like this is difficult to knock..tbh i couldnt listen to the track cuz im at werk...but the written seems like its got a good rythm....decent rhyme scheme but could've used more multi's imo..but i know its difficult with a subject like this one...all in all though lyrically it was pretty proper..had some good emotion and decent imagery...i hope shit works out for ya DAD man...i got a friend who's fightin Cancer right now dudes 27 and the doc gave him 1 yr to live so..i KINDA SORTA know ya angle...

anyway good drop ..nice emotion just werk on ya multi's if anything bro...stay up...!
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couldn't listen either, but i dig this shit man.
keep droppin`

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ok thanks for the tip and just so you guys don't get the wrong idea, this rap isn't about my Dad but for others who are dealing with this kind of pain. I'm just taking their place and using my lyrics to speak out their emotions.
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It was ok... liked the subject matter and emotion... but it was a little simple
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