My Ambition

[Kulture]

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You need to restrain as you tend to strain like your doing it down the fast lane,
don’t complain i can tell your feeling pain off my rhymes as they are insane,
You aren’t no rebel, your just some stessful speckle, so i advise you to be careful,
Philosophy is in the game like monopoly, ya’ll just some monstrosity, no mythology,
You say you write high, you just told a white lie, i excite the blue sky,
You should of never messed with me cause this is something you can’t handle,
im sorry if i’m a rascal like dizzee rascal, but i like to travel without a scramble,
im sorry but your just an actual kid who should of got strangled and then tangled,
you don’t merk, your just a jerk that says “Shit not more enemys”,
jealously is what you sound as i am legacy, as im incredibly weaponry,
I know you don’t need to talk, cause thats just crosstalk, and you stalk like a hawk,
but im an eagle and i prey cause im legal to destroy you like xray as this just ended today,
is that safe to say okay? but i want to at least blow you away halfway with my straight sway
i’m the real G, like G-funk but your a trainee with no spunk, oh and this isn’t no joke,
as i have just awoke and broke the cloak as i just spoke with a smoke,
you may think your crazy, but strangely your a baby mainly, you don’t get paid like me daily
i help you suggest that i’m the best in the wild wild west, as i progress,
without a slip of stress, if you was entered in a contest, you would win the slugfest,
you absolute mess,

yeah i do deserve around of applause as im going to cause you to pause,
you think im brave? i think you need to go and shave the shame away,
as im the new wave of fame, so move aside and let me reclaim, behave,
you have a fucked up mind, let me define the reason why u never got signed,
cause your just blind that theres no re-rewind that was just a remind,
i have the crowd that are loud, you just have your head up in the cloud,
believe me im a big surprise so let me impervise as i rise and yes this applies,
your the god fairy as i hit heavy, im steady and ready but never empty,
your twenty im younger, im hyped like a hungry monster, as im a stevie wonder,
i used to do short paragraphs, i used to put every thought like second half,
but mine always used to promote as yours demote as it travels out of your throat,
mine floats with the flow, you just pull out quotes that don’t even go,
i just say rhymes that come to mind, im in prime time you lost ya mind?,
some people were born with a dick in there mouth, your dad shoved his down south,
if i was there, i would of grabbed the cord and watched you twirl and whirl,
you should leave the rap teachings to me, please, your just dreaming you was like me,

you still on that weed?, i’ll assassinate you like on assassins creed,
i can still hear you breathe but i rise from beneath as i proceed,
while you just concede and i succeed, admit its coming to an defeat,
do you need me to repeat that i’m an elite and that ill squash you like mincemeat,
you swear cause your aware that i’m always prepaired while your in midair,
saying this isn’t fair, well i’m sorry but you just simiply can’t compare,
my lyrics hit harder as they are like armour, i conquer your a dropper,
you was a foster child but i rather be lost in the wild than brought up like you,
you snooze you loose, but we will never be able to call a truce, may u be excused,
no i’m the person that created child abuse, that would leave with a child bruise,
i hit hard like when optimus prime was looking for the crystal shard,
im built like a guard, but your built like a retard, after this i will leave you scarred,
i can end this anytime but you try your hardest everytime, our beef is like war crime,
i’m a big boy, you still play with your toys, as i deploy and annoy,
you until i get an employ, i express my self with joy as your the decoy,
and i’m a get rich or die tryin’ and ima do this quite frightening as im firing,
while you’ll still be hiding and hopefully dieing,

[KING RUM12]

Ur in there may need a lil structure of sum sort
Decent tho I like it

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[Kulture]

Thanks for the feedback appreciate it.

[Kause mc]

I agree theres sum decent lines. Structure def needed. Umm cool that u made it longer than 16 lines which shows u can accually write sumthing long insted of a quick written. I do it sumtimes just to stay active but u no. Anyways lookin forward to more bro welcome to the site

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[MonuMental]

Long as hell, nothing wrong with that. I couldn't really put my finger on any sort of structure, either. Work on that. Otherwise, good drop for a whole book.

[EcKsTaSy]

nice rhymes, but ya, jus like what was said before..work it out into bars..easier to read and you'll hear it better when you're writing..good shit bro..welcome.

[Kulture]

Thanks everyone i'll stay active.