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MonuMental
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Ventilating

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Ventilating, plate on the table, my dinner's waiting,
Scintillating, feeling my eyes raping the nickel plating,
Incubating rage in the place of hated and bitter raving,
If fate's in my way, I'm saving my face and dropping casings,
Cursing occasions that worsen my hate, a sour cadence,
Birthing creations from lyrics that man my battle stations,
Turning the tables in mirror matches with fallen fables,
Burning in ashes of mangled tangles of falling angels,
Choking and strangled I dangle over the threshold,
Of deaths goals pressed whole into a depressed mold,
Headstones, odes to generations of dead souls,
Who let those that embittered them suffer death throes,
Waking up at the table, now my bread's cold,
Lights off, sunshine blends fuller with dust motes,
Soul's old, my blood lends color to crushed hopes,
Flows on, away from my final clutter of brush strokes.
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[center]Peel back the facade and behold a bold insanity,
With no repose or vanity, composed of inhumanity.[/center]
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[center]Illest Awards For 2011:
Text MC of the Year- MonuMental
Class of 2011- MonuMental, Enlightend, 3rd String, CBK, and Pest
Writer of the Year- MonuMental
Written of the Year- MonuMental 'A Series of Unfortunate Events'[/center]

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Re: Ventilating

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haha this shit burned the page man.. str8 fieyar.. no negative feed.. like the scheme and the jump off rhyming you used.. really feeling this... damn we like the heavyweights in the written world dogg... keep it up

-- Sun Jun 19, 2011 4:18 pm --

haha this shit burned the page man.. str8 fieyar.. no negative feed.. like the scheme and the jump off rhyming you used.. really feeling this... damn we like the heavyweights in the written world dogg... keep it up
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Re: Ventilating

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Already, bruh!! Lol that has a ring to it. Thanks for the feed.
[center]Peel back the facade and behold a bold insanity,
With no repose or vanity, composed of inhumanity.[/center]
[center]Image[/center]
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[center]Illest Awards For 2011:
Text MC of the Year- MonuMental
Class of 2011- MonuMental, Enlightend, 3rd String, CBK, and Pest
Writer of the Year- MonuMental
Written of the Year- MonuMental 'A Series of Unfortunate Events'[/center]

[center]a-series-of-unfortunate-events-vt23866.html[/center]
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Re: Ventilating

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hey bro this was a GREAT read! not only did u hav the multis the punches the little wordplay... shit, this has it all

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Choking and strangled I dangle over the threshold,
Of deaths goals pressed whole into a depressed mold,
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Re: Ventilating

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Shit nice flow, rhyming everything man loved it lol no advice I could give you here, keep them coming. :D
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Re: Ventilating

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Appreciate the feed, man.
[center]Peel back the facade and behold a bold insanity,
With no repose or vanity, composed of inhumanity.[/center]
[center]Image[/center]
[center]Image[/center]
[center]Image[/center]
[center]Illest Awards For 2011:
Text MC of the Year- MonuMental
Class of 2011- MonuMental, Enlightend, 3rd String, CBK, and Pest
Writer of the Year- MonuMental
Written of the Year- MonuMental 'A Series of Unfortunate Events'[/center]

[center]a-series-of-unfortunate-events-vt23866.html[/center]
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