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Joe Saint
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Rellik Diss

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I lost the battle but any feed back will be helpful


Rellik aint shit he may be a MOD but all he does is sit on his fake throne and try and play GOD but all is his is a Bitch-Ass DOG/
You see im gonna rip Rellik a part, he coulnt be a killeR if he was stung by a Bee in the left Knee and ate a Piece of Bacon, or a HOG/
i got my hand on the TRIGGER i guess you can call me COCKY/
ill handle you in round ! then i guess you can call me ROCKY/
Imma put a curse on this Relic(Rellik) like im part of the Renaissance/
This Relic is gonna get burned like a sam-Witch from the Renaissance/
The only way you could win this Tournament is if you had EVOLUTION backing you up/ evolution-rellik-vt21849.html
I should have put a WARNING up cause this Shit is bout to be NASTIER than 2 girls and 1 cup/
lets just say this battle ended really QUIX cause my flow is SICK while yours is like a BITCH/
it just SUCKS like the WICKed witch of the SICK, you should stick with writing Poems cause that is your NICHE/
your Verse couldnt be HARD if you battle ECKSTASY so just wait for the next tournament cause ill just battle THA GOD/
when you lose this battle you just throw in your CARDS and retire like all "GOOD" MODS should but i guess you wont so ill just kill you like im playing COD/(CALL OF DUTY)

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First bar wasnt that good but the 2nd bar with Cocky and Rocky was sick. The 2 girls and 1 cup was funny. This was a nice drop. 7/10

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Um........ no it wasn't...... at all...... from the lack of complexity to the lack of any rhyme scheme whatsoever garbage from top to bottom is my personal opinio u need to reassess what u believe a good punch to be......
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HMM i will say that your gettin better...with sims/metas not quite there with the punchlines though...keep werkin on that ..and try gettin a lil more intricate with your rhyme scheme..(more inner rhymes at least) ..keep elevatin man..1
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Yeah i thought this was pretty baisc yo, nothing really hard hitting at all to be honest, there is more to 'dissing' then calling them swear words ya dig.
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Enlightend wrote:Um........ no it wasn't...... at all...... from the lack of complexity to the lack of any rhyme scheme whatsoever garbage from top to bottom is my personal opinio u need to reassess what u believe a good punch to be......


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Post by Omnie »

Have you battled Meika???...you should.
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She would battle him bro...


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Post by Meika »

Ohh i will

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I thought money couldn't leave feed on j.s stuff or vote ? Lol and joe dude this is just so........ Sirr are you on drugs ?
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Not a big fan of this one yo but keep writing man i can see the potential in you. Keep it up bro

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