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individual deception, damage your visual perception/
i got my lyrical game protected like sexual contraception/
leave you dreaming like inception, not setting an exception/
you and hip hop? i got a problem with the union like a wedding reception/
like rabid cattle i started branding, my flow is so outstanding/
so before you test the best eject like an emergency landing/
they question my rapping, so i started commanding/
and just like pregnent women i left my style of rhythm expanding/
you clowns belong in the circus, better yet burning in my furnace/
expecting to go platinum but not recieving a single purchase/
like stiched lips i'll leave you wordless, these rapper are simply worthless/
leave you so nervous and questioning your very own purpose/
my wordplay aligned,and immortally designed/
the reason these rappers turned away and physically resigned/
inclined to be undefined, declined to be confined/
so it;s a reason for my fist and your jaw to be intertwined/
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Post by Moneymaker »

The begining was dope but about half way though it the flow just though me off


Can you drop some feed on this. http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/short ... 22741.html

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Post by pest »

pretty sikk drop...
good multies, but basic... the vocab enhances the multies tho...
solid 7/10

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It was a dope drop, Arc, multies were on point and all the vocab was snappin and in correct context, but I've seen you drop shit that absolutely crushed this, man. Needless to say, it was still tight. Stay up, bruh.
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nice story line
I liked it... but try to do something less basic next time

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Post by Kause mc »

Yea its a dope verse but imo you got alota cliché words in there. Cool tho its a good read.

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Post by Thu Hem »

enjoy readin dis shit... flow was on point
good multis used and superb vocab..
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Post by Grim »

nice concept and idea but it came off as fairly basic..the vocab was nice but the 'ception' rhymeing was eehh.....everything was there except the complexity in your rhyme schemes...step that up and you'll be straight for...i'd give this like 7/10...nice drop
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Post by Tha Dark Prince »

This was sick.. Good use of multis structure was good.. Flow was well too though thrown off here and there, but overall dope drop

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hearing alot about the basic thing.
thanks for the feedback, will work on that
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This was cool. Had some dope lines in there. Some better then others. Could def be stronger, all and all i enjoyed reading. thanks for dropping.
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thought it was cool, but you like alot of people seem to believe if the last few letters are the same they rhyme enough to stick together but that gets old quick.... first try rhyming more then one simple words with a multi syllable word then go from there.... basically perception contraception and exception rhyme yes.. just not that well
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