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Technology Revolution (Little jay)

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(chorus)(x2)
see this is the technology revolution,
biological advanced in tribulation,
cyborg stance in contribution,
never had a chance in distribution,
so see witch mind is more advanced,
don’t hate the resolution.


see they call this the technology generation,
my intellect turns complications, infection termination,
but now a days you cant even have an intelligent conversation,
so whats the point in trying, or puffing joints in dedication,
i create flows like cancer, but a biological engineered mutation,
i imply fear im diabolical, my creation with a psychological indication,
see i reach for the stars i’m astrological, make bazaar seem natural,
make moving mountains with my mind possible, make time travel operable,
a master mind at work but not unstable, i take rhymes to a new level, now disable,
like a chemist rearranging a periodic table, always changing advancement so amazing,
i liquefy words like im paraphrasing, see the future like a crystal ball gazing,
surgically rip the game apart rhyming is my martial art but insane like im hell raising,
make flows addictive and causes destruction,like cocaine tornado, volcano in function,
unorthodox pure to see with my vindictive suction, mentally superior i hold the key,
can’t comprehend, inferior to the third degree, like a alternate ego i guaranty,
this is my game call me the referee,show me respect and ill treat ya the same after my killing spree,

(chorus)(x2)
see this is the technology revolution,
biological advanced in tribulation,
cyborg stance in contribution,
never had a chance in distribution,
so see witch mind is more advanced,
don’t hate the resolution.


i make flows advanced like disease in ur brain call it a zombie infection,
how can you be smart when you exclaim that you believe natural selection,
i take aim in dissection, i spread blame with my recollection,
when i spit its fire and flame intersection a frame virus detection,
i came in the technology revolution, reclaim with varies of rhymes in complexion,
like a massive deflection tired of all the corrections, cant rap with out persecution,
so what the use, to take all this verbal abuse, leave them with a verbal execution,
lose dilution, i blew a fuse, bionic attribution, no solution, super sonic absolution,
mass panic falls to confusion, so much noise pollution, end it all electrocution,
see im manic, my flows deeper the Atlantic but straight fire, volcanic,
im like the grim reaper i cause havoc ima diamond, fake rappers are straight plastic,
over Germanic no bodys non negotiable im a genus but straight psychopathic,
i make deep lyrics even when i sound sarcastic, plan writing gymnastic,
damn, adrenalin in a can so drastic, biological advanced neoplastic,
im hype of the mic call me mr enthusiastic, lethal sniper rubber band man mr elastic,
white striped bagel tiger ready to strike so when ya fight me better think twice.

(chorus)(x2)
see this is the technology revolution,
biological advanced in tribulation,
cyborg stance in contribution,
never had a chance in distribution,.
so see witch mind is more advanced,
don’t hate the resolution…...
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Re: Technology Revolution (Little jay)

Post by Ambiguous Realm »

hm.. probably sounds better then i read it, decent though, enjoyed it, good vocab, u used infection twice but the first one wasn't to complete the rhymescheme just a word used but i noticed it, used biological a lot, i dunno i'd avoid using large words more than twice at all.. they stand out pretty easily, overall still decent, kudos
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ya I stumbled over it a lil..would like to hear this actually spilt
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when i do it, it flows pretty nice i might be the first verse in audio (adventively) its kinda part of my writing style i go for complexity originality, i write a little differently when i collab thou full of vocab and multies maybe ill post a few verses of mine on here

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Post by Kuhlerblynd »

I would agree alot with what Evolution and TOYH on this one...

Some of the lines seemed stretched, but it also depends on the beat and how you flow. I like some of the imagery you laid out and how you stuck on topic throughout this. I think the idea of it is a cool topic to write about and doesn't get spoken on very much, so its not something that people read/listen everyday. Over-all, this was a good approach to the topic, delivered well as far as the content of your lines, but could have flowed more cleanly. Keep the drops coming bro. One.

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