Take ya Dreams

Haz · Post by **Haz** » Wed Jan 17, 2007 1:30 am

i'll Take ya Dreams Out Cha Wig Like Extensions gone
8 Will Heat Out Cha Lids "POPS" Not To Mention Moms/
im Never Calm Deadly Arms Like Fungis Infested
Stormy Weatha Steady Harm'd Wit Bluntin n Head Lifts/
Lines Across My Neckliss "BLOW AWAY" Like Reckliss
Protected Wit Pure Potent Detected Wit Poor Holdin/
Wrong Desicionz i'll Find Myself "On a Pit" Like Fruit
Gravestone Carved "Soul Stacks" My Cash is Due/
my Past is Thru Like Taken Rounds Chest Wise
Rapid Tools Shaken Down Nex Guys Repp Dies/
You Can Get Slaughter in A Minute Like Fight Club
Dead Daughters Projects Neva Finish'd Light Dubs/
The Hoods in "Transmission" Slippin To Get Fix'd
We Good Like Psycotic Parentz Flippin To Each Kid?/
Cloudin They Minds Wits Pounds wit The Grind
Crowns Round Each line "Savior is White like U.k."/
Drown in ya Own Blood Wit Hits You May "Blue Fate"
Like Oceans Driftin Posted Liftin Crew Weight Who Say/
Lifes Great i'll Take Da Knife Straight Cut My Lights
Wait, Judgement Budgin Hidin Timin For That Fight Day/

Mac · Post by **Mac** » Wed Jan 17, 2007 1:59 am

Good Shit, You Got Your Structure On Lock Man. Definatley, Upgraded From Fuckin Wack To Just Wack. Shit's Lookin Up For You. Lol J/p

6/10 Good Shit

Haz · Post by **Haz** » Wed Jan 17, 2007 2:03 am

Aiight Den Good Lookin Out

precise · Post by **precise** » Wed Jan 17, 2007 3:47 am

lmfao, i guess what mac said was... kind of a compliment? hahaha

well this was more of a spit then a poem, but anyways there were some nice lines, and the rhymes were pretty dope, but really rhymes are mainly for a spit haha, but at least there were good mettas so i suppose it can stay in this section.

anyways overall, definately good, and its good to see your improvin on your structure, gettin used to rappin on boards instead of chatroom battlin

Haz · Post by **Haz** » Wed Jan 17, 2007 4:22 am

Mc-Soulja · Post by **Mc-Soulja** » Wed Jan 17, 2007 11:38 am

Crowns Round Each line "Savior is White like U.k."/
Drown in ya Own Blood Wit Hits You May "Blue Fate"
Like Oceans Driftin Posted Liftin Crew Weight Who Say/
Lifes Great i'll Take Da Knife Straight Cut My Lights
Wait, Judgement Budgin Hidin Timin For That Fight Day/

Nice Multies

Haz · Post by **Haz** » Wed Jan 17, 2007 11:57 am

Thanks Soulja Appreciate Da Feed Back

~Symbolikull~ · Post by **~Symbolikull~** » Wed Jan 17, 2007 1:26 pm

I liked this, but it could get confusin wit the way you write it, but thats you, so keep doin you man, shit was dope in my eyes

Haz · Post by **Haz** » Thu Jan 18, 2007 3:35 am

Aiight Ghost Good Lookin Out

Haz · Post by **Haz** » Thu Jan 18, 2007 3:36 am

Aiight Ghost Good Lookin Out

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