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Evolution

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this is the evolution of mind, fluid as time
turn the bad to good in a confusion of rhymes
cruising to find the world through your eyes
you could choose to die thoughts knuced and tied
but who decides when the tide will change
choosing life over death when your mind is strained
inside we pained but we still persevere
we flex in fear not hearing so we check our ears
a wreck is near but we dont see it coming
it takes mass unrest for we'll see the summit
in need of nothing yet we all so materialistic
we nearly too twisted living corrupt an imperialistic
its mearly a gimmick but somethings gotta give
change is illusive til we find what the problem is
theres not a kid who doesnt fear for the end
brain washed by TV never touching a sword or pen
we swore to defend our children from reality
til our fallacies were lying exactly were the malice be
the finality of what we created will lead to change
it may be in vane or be insane, but theres too much to gain
in our final evolution can we achieve this late?
as we see the gates of change in the seeds of fate
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Re: evolution

Post by leeroi green »

bravo i cant breakdown the entire drop but this

we swore to defend our children from reality
til our fallacies were lying exactly were the malice be
the finality of what we created will lead to change
it may be in vane or be insane, but theres too much to gain
in our final evolution can we achieve this late?

i did like well iliked it all but i really liked how you finished only thing is "lying exactly where" threw me off for a split second any ways you already know what it is keep dropping this type of ish and remember to feed others posts as well
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Re: Evolution

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Pretty nice fam its a hard read maybe write ya written with more of a structure. But other than that this was hot dude good post

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We might not b on the same page. Well to b fair im on my phone so its not like a computer screen

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This was pretty nice...the multis were on point as always really kept the flow of the piece moving along nicely...well written and very smooth...keep it up brah!

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Re: Evolution

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Yet another one of your pieces that I thoroughly enjoyed reading. I'm diggin your style. No comparisons or anything, but we def use some of the same elements in our pieces, and I can relate to your thought process. Nice.
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