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Ted vs Steel (JSteel wins)

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4 bars
due in 72 hours
no crew votes
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Re: Ted vs Steel

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yo,sorry for taking so long to check,im studying for an exam...72 hours for drop start now ...ryt?

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Re: Ted vs Steel

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72 hours start now

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Re: Ted vs Steel

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yo,ted,can i get another 24 hours afta the 72 hour mark,wont be able to drop...have something else important to do,peace

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-- Sun May 29, 2011 9:27 pm --

yo,ted,can i get another 24 hours afta the 72 hour mark,wont be able to drop...have something else important to do,peace

-- Sun May 29, 2011 9:28 pm --

yo,ted,can i get another 24 hours afta the 72 hour mark,wont be able to drop...have something else important to do,peace

-- Sun May 29, 2011 9:28 pm --

yo,ted,can i get another 24 hours afta the 72 hour mark,wont be able to drop...have something else important to do,peace

-- Sun May 29, 2011 9:29 pm --

yo,ted,can i get another 24 hours afta the 72 hour mark,wont be able to drop...have something else important to do,peace

-- Mon May 30, 2011 12:30 am --

yo ted,can i get another 24 hours,i wont be able to post now ,have some important stuff to do...
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Re: Ted vs Steel

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Ill give you one more day

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-- Tue May 31, 2011 7:17 am --

0 and 10 what the fuck you just Suck/
Some big fat ass Trucker, damn you got no Luck/
Post the battle in 4 posts you just lost your flow/
You keep on postponing it i think your gonna No Show/
Now lets talk about your punches, they suck like a Gay Man on Viagra/
The only thing you win in is ryhming but that is just first grade shit/
If you can get Personal with me you might win this/
But till then lets just show everyone that you got a LISP
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Re: Ted vs Steel

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Im like t.b PUTTING YOU in your coffin(coughin),your BRUISING YOU as your droppin(dropping his verse and fallin ) your FEUDING TOO with yourself ,just flopping *

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-- Wed Jun 01, 2011 12:59 am --

the pains moving you to stop it,but im spewing rude increasing your losses realise how much you suck and cant spit proper

-- Wed Jun 01, 2011 1:03 am --

Get rid of you bicycle(by sick kill)style, mighty hit lines crack and damage ,

-- Wed Jun 01, 2011 1:11 am --

,its like having two dices,ul die when im dicing This guy ,cant attak just a maggot,this dude aint fly ,il be bashin

-- Wed Jun 01, 2011 1:12 am --

,its like having two dices,ul die when im dicing This guy ,cant attak just a maggot,this dude aint fly ,il be bashin

-- Wed Jun 01, 2011 1:15 am --

you and greatness dont mix like oil and water ,couldnt flow wel if ya were free drinkz at a bar cuz

-- Wed Jun 01, 2011 1:18 am --

this teddy bear jus sleeps with kids, he needs n bitch,c ant get any,feels so weak like an erection after semen leaves

-- Wed Jun 01, 2011 1:21 am --

expo,first line ,him and joe saint are cussing each other and beefing,aparently saint and ted r the same perzon ,t.b is tubercolosis and when you have it you cough,

-- Wed Jun 01, 2011 1:22 am --

ay wrote this on writers block,mind it

-- Wed Jun 01, 2011 1:23 am --

ay wrote this on writers block,mind it
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Re: Ted vs Steel

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well i gotta keep it real i absolutely cannot give the flow cat to steel and man i read it over and over trying to catch it although i thought i had it in the first bars but alas i was mistaken
flow ted
however steel had a few good concepts and some decent wordplay idk if you researched it but ted used to be teddy bear. ted hit you with your win loss record and the fact you need four post for four bars which evens out the personals cat
wordplay steel
personals tie
now ted seriously flow show suck luck this lisp will not earn you a multies cat vote ever and vi.ag.ra you did nothing with in fact you didnt rhyme and you said he would win in rhyming then you said he would win if he got the personals cat (all bad)
multies steel

tbh i only enjoyed this because you two are evenly matched that being said
MVGT J steel

keep working at it and you two will be alright its a process and growth is a sure thing as long as you want to elevate
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Re: Ted vs Steel

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0 and 10 what the fuck you just Suck/
Some big fat ass Trucker, damn you got no Luck/
(not bad,personal,)

Post the battle in 4 posts you just lost your flow/
You keep on postponing it i think your gonna No Show/
(flow,personal,punch,^wordplay)

Now lets talk about your punches, they suck like a Gay Man on Viagra/
The only thing you win in is ryhming but that is just first grade shit/
(ok)
If you can get Personal with me you might win this/
But till then lets just show everyone that you got a LISP
(ok)

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Im like t.b PUTTING YOU in your coffin(coughin),your BRUISING YOU as your droppin(dropping his verse and fallin ) your FEUDING TOO with yourself ,just flopping *
(meh,didnt like)
the pains moving you to stop it,but im spewing rude increasing your losses realise how much you suck and cant spit proper
(no flow,didnt like)
Get rid of you bicycle(by sick kill)style, mighty hit lines crack and damage ,
(didnt like)

,its like having two dices,ul die when im dicing This guy ,cant attak just a maggot,this dude aint fly ,il be bashin
(this is ok)

you and greatness dont mix like oil and water ,couldnt flow wel if ya were free drinkz at a bar cuz
(no)

this teddy bear jus sleeps with kids, he needs n bitch,cant get any,feels so weak like an erection after semen leaves
(ok this is better)

mvgt:ted for punches,personals,enjoyment,flow,it was tie on the personals,
to both keep elvating and creating punches,use more multies,nameplay,wordplay, and personals,and vote on that if your reading this http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/splas ... 22375.html
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Re: Ted vs Steel

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Re: Ted vs Steel

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0 and 10 what the fuck you just Suck/
Some big fat ass Trucker, damn you got no Luck/
started off personal but after that went no where with it, direct it to him or incorporate wordplay
Post the battle in 4 posts you just lost your flow/
You keep on postponing it i think your gonna No Show/
haha pretty funny i though considering all the times he did edit, nice punch
Now lets talk about your punches, they suck like a Gay Man on Viagra/
The only thing you win in is ryhming but that is just first grade shit/
didn't rhyme / or connect/ very badly worded[/b]
If you can get Personal with me you might win this/
But till then lets just show everyone that you got a LISP
started cool then went huh? @ end

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m like t.b PUTTING YOU in your coffin(coughin),your BRUISING YOU as your droppin(dropping his verse and fallin ) your FEUDING TOO with yourself ,just flopping *
he pains moving you to stop it,but im spewing rude increasing your losses realise how much you suck and cant spit proper
you tried @ wordplay and it was meh, bar is way way outstretched, and the flow was me as well... all rhymed til the end - punchline not really - may have stung a little
Get rid of you bicycle(by sick kill)style, mighty hit lines crack and damage ,
,its like having two dices,ul die when im dicing This guy ,cant attak just a maggot,this dude aint fly ,il be bashin
Ummm this was all over the place. finish one idea and close it off stong
you and greatness dont mix like oil and water ,couldnt flow wel if ya were free drinkz at a bar cuz
this teddy bear jus sleeps with kids, he needs n bitch,c ant get any,feels so weak like an erection after semen leaves
alright cool punch


I dont know if i got your bars broken down right but i did my best with what you gave us///


Both had 1 good punch... Both verses I did not enjoy but reading Jsteel. I feel like his bars were very very stretched.. and it gave me a headache not to be rude.. so i'd give enjoyment to Ted.. although J did attempt more wordplay

i guess ill put their 1 bar vs their 1 bar... they both were personal in their good bar - but j added wordplay to his with more creativity
so my vote goes to J... no hate

return the favor & vote fairly please
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Re: Ted vs Steel

Post by Tha Dark Prince »

Ted:

0 and 10 what the fuck you just Suck/ Some big fat ass Trucker, damn you got no Luck/

bad..but personal is there.. It's jus too simple

Post the battle in 4 posts you just lost your flow/ You keep on postponing it i think your gonna No Show/

flow's there a bit.. But with no multis and what not it is a very weak bar

Now lets talk about your punches, they suck like a Gay Man on Viagra/ The only thing you win in is ryhming but that is just first grade shit/

no...

If you can get Personal with me you might win this/ But till then lets just show everyone that you got a LISP

weak.. But ok..

Jsteel:

Im like t.b PUTTING YOU in your coffin(coughin),your BRUISING YOU as your droppin
your FEUDING TOO with yourself ,just flopping the pains moving you to stop it,but im spewing rude increasing your losses realise how much you suck and cant spit
proper --

u had it nice at first but ye lost it halfway, bar is too stretched man, flow was ok but got put off in the end

Get rid of you bicycle(by sick kill) style, mighty hit lines crack and damage ,-- ,its like having two dices,ul die when im dicing This guy ,cant attak just a maggot,this dude aint fly ,il be bashin -

no.. Could see what ya intended with wordly but still, nah very weak

- you and greatness dont mix like oil and water ,couldnt flow wel if ya were free drinkz at a bar cuz -- this teddy bear jus sleeps with kids, he needs n bitch,c ant get any,feels so weak like an erection after semen leaves -

ok this was better, punch is there, flow not so much

all in all, Ted you gotta come with better concepts though, some bars were jus too simple n weak, Steel your flow was off, bars were stretched which further throws the flow off, you had nice concepts n wordplay though compared to ya opponent which 4me gets a the vote, but overall more is needed if you wanna be a decent battler, both of you, Steel you NEED to sort that structure shit out man, and work on your rhyme schemes n flow, Ted you need ta just up your game man, all round it seems like you don't put much thought or effort into your battles..

MVGT Jsteel

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Re: Ted vs Steel

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