Part 1 - Malicious Activity - (Straight Bars)

[Mic S]

I started to just type and managed 4 bars (Saints crew piece inspired me) since I put a verse up but ended up leaving on good terms... anyways story short
I'm going to keep adding onto it.. cuz this sounds dope to me

Bars For Days, Writtens Hard Like Prison Gaurds Looking at Bars For Days
Bars For Days, Vivid Dumbness Like Livid Drunkness Being at Bars For Days
Dayum
Triple X, Tic Tac Toe, Three in a row. I Strike out Text Heads
Hardcore, I'm talking action hard, vin diesel bars, Triple X Sex!
Ugh Time for metaphors
Im Hott - Like friction, I'm a train on the tracks, Rap Crucifixion
Death bombs, To Prisms, Watch heads brains peel way back, It's Circumcision
Haha
I'm excellent, This shits Eloquence, I'm me, its all relevance
I write, segements that can be used for evidence, body bags of M&M's

Now if your the real slim shady please try to stand up!!!! haha

[Ted Bundey]

Nice drop i would give it a 8 out of 10

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[QwarterZ]

this was pretty decent you structured your lines nicely this style seems to suit you but needs some work but after its done Im sure itll come together nicely...nice drop

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[Mic S]

Dope thanks for feedback you guys.. Next drop I'll incorporate what has been said to elevate. Thank you

Here is my 2 links
http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/the-b ... ml#p172578
http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/stagnant-vt22478.html