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Preparation For Elevation

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If You Read This Please Feed
So I Could Elevate.. You Dig




Flow On Tonkers..I Kid Shit
Goin Bonkers.. Its Thrillin
Str8 Eye Candy Like Clothin Sponsors For Illest
Ah' Spit Give Addictive Qualities So Properly
Equality Not Probably
Naked Skier Demo Body Frees
Who Stoppin Me Ought To Be I Mean Got To Be Superman
Ironic'ly I Lay Greatpowers In Ah' Cript Tonite Like Superman
Guess Superman Wont Be Handling Demo Wit Game Betas
Cuz Wit Space Flavor Text Drops Leavin Great Craters
This Flame Makin Crazed Ganstas Look Like Gay Skaters
I Blaze Bangers Lame Haters Get Blown Up Like J Vapors
Wat They Say Is So Simple They Dont Weigh Wit My Pencil
They Screamin Demo Str8 Chin It Like Makin Examples
Shit......



These Bitches Cant Fuckin Keep Up Like Ah' Dog Wit One Leg
Punches Have Em Twist'd In Tha Sky Like God Wit Ah' Keg
I Text Ah' Chicken Thru Shells Like Im Bloggin Wit Eggs
Hi Grade Flow They Lightweights Like They Noddin Wit Regs
They Flower Soft N I Be Floorin Pedals Like Im Fast Wit Cars
Dumb Out Hard Yet I Got More Wits Than My Last 5 Bars
Boi'



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Re: Preparation For Elevation

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Metas off the chain, flow is ill as aids, that superman bar was beast.

"These bitches can't keep up like a dog with 1 leg..."
^^^ what more is there to say, lol.

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Re: Preparation For Elevation

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iunno man. its alright. me not bein a text guy or anythin, but one thing if anything, find a subject and stick to it. yea you had some good lines, but theres no reason why EVERY line cant be a good line. some of it seemed a little forced like your jus tryna get it to rhyme. jus think a little deeper and get a more original sound and style. honestly to me, you didnt write anything i havent heard before. really. you definetly have your multies down tho ill give you that. jus elaborate a lil more. put those multies and rhyme schemes into a certain subject, and your golden man. i jus wanna read something with a purpose. but thats just me. good job tho man im glad to see your tryna elevate
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Good Looks Meek And Loon'E

Imma Start Droppin More Topicals So I Can Practice On Specific Subjects
Uppin More Feed
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