K Panda VS Joe Saint ( K Pan wins via NO SHOW)

[Alvin]

TOPIC:

Surviving in a Jungle

DUE DATE:

1 Week After Check INs

BAR LENGTH:

8 Bars

CATEGORIES:

-Storytelling
-Flow
-Creativity
-Multies
-Wordplay

SERIOUS VOTES ONLY WITH EXPO'S

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[Joe Saint]

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[Alvin]

_The Birth of K Panda_
...chapter one: the kidnapping...



I was snatched and kenneled, a bat bashed my mental, rendering me almost lifeless
Striking everything with my tight fists, throwing swift kicks till the light hits

The wood boards split with the right hit, chunks burst into this newly lit place
An unusually bitter taste hits my face like listening to Joe Saints mix tapes

The smell is irritant, sounds of eeriness in increments, I'm alone, completely lost
The feeling of death is imminent, keeping me vigilant, an immigrant but at what cost?

Tree branches crack, with each step that I track, echoes of each leaf that I smash
Three steps & I'm back, or it seems in this crap, to where I deemed as my crash

I ventured about, taking notes of all the stressors in route, centered in doubt
I reach for food but my sensors wig out, followed by a tempered blow to the snout

I regain my composure, ignore the pain and lean towards, the beast that struck first
I cock back the paw, land on his jaw, open mouthed and all, but in awe, his blood thirst

Grew bigger, he came back like Jaws vs. Flipper, swinging and roaring, landing one on the liver
I executed a scissor, a stripper meets zipper, squished his mister, till all I heard was quivers

But then the bushes caught my attention, with goliath in suppression, I reached for a weapon
"I'll strike without question!" my heart pounding in connections, in this Jungle dimension-

... To Be Continued

-- Wed May 25, 2011 6:40 am --

0-1, in my favor...

-- Thu May 26, 2011 6:07 am --

0-2, in my favor... Where you at Joe?

[32neilz]

Damn man, I love the flow, nice use of multies, storytelling was excellent. Nice creativity, and a good angle which you approached it from. Only thing I would say that u flopped on was wordplay, maybe it's me but I didn't see much. But if joe ain't dropped and you both agree.
Mvgt:panda

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[Alvin]

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K Panda Wins via NO SHOW