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Warm Up 1

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lol..

Im Super High.
Northern Lights x G-13




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Leavin Hopeless Vets Wit Broken Necks
Play N I'll Rip Like Tape In Old Cassettes
Blow Like Techs Roastin Sets Wit Focus Text
Imma Shine In Here Like Gold Barrettes
Bringin Death To Wacks Textin Crack
Trashin Rappers Like Im Eatin Debbie Snacks
Skippin Thru Stars Got Trip'd Now Im Sittin On Mars
Flow Nuts.. Give Me Hersheys I'll Have Mr. Good Bars
Punches Hittin Dumb Hard N That Aint Metaphorical
Can You Die Quick?...
Wat I Said Rhetorical See As I Shred N Slaughter U
Fight On Wit Me You'll Be History Like Biographies (History - His Story)
Deadly Prophecies...
N Wat I See Is Chillin.. Look In My Eyes N You'll Freeze
So If You Talk Slick Like Ah' Queer Who Wear Lip Gloss
You'll Be Forecast'd For Death Like Weathermen Wit Hearin Loss
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Re: Warm Up 1

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yeah you got dat G13..nice i prefer G12 prsonally...haha

you def need to copp our latest mixxtape..B.I.C.=Big Island Crypt..youd be able to relate...trusst...anyway

nice drop imo..you got the wordplay and punches obviously

i thought it started out pretty well

Leavin Hopeless Vets Wit Broken Necks
Play N I'll Rip Like Tape In Old Cassettes
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my fave line i think started gettin more intricate..but by the last line or two ya connections werent linkin quite as well imo..

oh yeah i like the little debbies punch tho... :clap:

keep doin ya thing..1
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Re: Warm Up 1

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Your my favorite new rapper...


Blow Like Techs Roastin Sets Wit Focus Text
Imma Shine In Here Like Gold Barrettes...
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Re: Warm Up 1

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Thanks For Tha Feeds..
Yea.. I Start'd Rushin At Tha End.. But I'll Make Thha Punches More Consistent In Tha Connections Next Time..

Imma Check That Mixtape Too Dude.. I'll Let You Know How I Like It

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