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Jus A Start

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White Rhino x Sour Diesel x Train Wreck x Super Purple Kush


That Cypher Produced This Cypher

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Im In Ah' Diss Era Like My Game Jus Froze
Insane Ass Flows I Punch Wit N Aim For Nose
Chop N Cut Ya Bars While Plottin Up On Mars
Side Kick N Punch At Will Like Robin Hittin Cars
Slice Ya Dick Off Before You Fuck
N You Still Aint Droppin Shit Thats Hard
Pause..........
Now Im Right Back At It .Attackin. Str8 Body Baggin
Merk Em' N Hurt Em' Then Go In On Champs.. Mavericks
Shit Is So Tragic You Step'd Up N Got Ya Ass Kick'd
Oh! Beast Like Fat Kids.. Flow Rid Tha Game Like Magic's
Damn Im High .. What Happen'd
Ya'll Not Even Half My Size Or Fractions
Now Its Time For Action So As I Rhyme Wit Passion
Im Relapsin N Spasmin On Every Line Imagined
You So Basic But Read N Understand Wit No Hatin
Jumpin Off Tha Roof While You Still In Tha Basement


Let It Begin....

Wreck Tracks Wit Style N Text Crack For Smiles
U Next To Sink So Imma Have U Stretch'd Flat On Tiles
Next Text Tourney Gonna Be Ah' Mess Wack Or Wild
Yet I Bet Money Win Zip Like He Extractin Files
For Wins Im Thirsty As Trainees Pray Mercy On Ya Keys
Have Neilz Freezin Up.. Guess You Should Call Em 32 Degrees
So Sick Im Coughin Givin Deathsuits Like Grim On Prosecution
Time Travel N Kill Monkeys Jus To Put Ah' End To Evolution
Rip From Necks To Eyes Get Vex'd N Try To Go T Rex On Guys
I'll Look Like Ah' Gardener Tha Way I Lay Pest Aside
Put Ah' Noose Up On Omnie.. Trust Ya'll Crew Is So Phony
Slap Tha Hand Of God Like Zeus Was My Homie
Imma Kill This Site.. Hope Death Was On Ya Agenda
Cant Forget K.. Gotta Eat Em.. You Never Say No To Panda
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lol good cypher man, especially that last verse, name dropping like the best of them. liked the vibe, flow was on for the most part fell off in some areas, but kept a steady pace. enjoyable read man

but again stop capping every first letter shit gives me vertigo
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Shit, those panda commercials are hysterical.

As for the verses. Pretty good. Especially the second verse. I thought the punches for 32neilz and pest were the strongest. Keep it up.
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nice drop..capitalizing every first word makes me re-read shit hella..but good one
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Thanks For Leavin Feed.. I'll Work On tha Caps And Try To Keep Ah' Steadier Flow Next Time
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Yo Thanks For Tha Feed.
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