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Breakin' Bones

Post by Kau the Lion »

This is for that bitch Benny Bones who threw a hissy fit after I dumped on him...


We can not go toe to toe kid and I know you know this
Cause a battle with me . . . will naturally . . .
have Bones fighting the curve, like scoliosis.
His strident rhymes won’t be noticed only hopeless
cause this guy’s an actor. So my violent swagger
will make bones crack under pressure like a chiropractor.
Then he’s dieing after: cause he’s irrelevant and caustic
Plus with intelligence or logic you can tell he’s into cock spit.
It’s his secret but the fact is: Bones is such a faggot
that he’s literally . . . a skeleton in a closet.

Bitch tried to verse me but that didn’t seem to work
cause I stay above bones like six feet of dirt.
Kids needs to learn . . . so class is in session,
Now watch as I school bones: a paleontology lesson
my presence got him stressing cause I’m smacking fuckers.
Bones in my hands making noise like I’m cracking knuckles.
This “rapper” buckles . . . I don’t usually stop for cockroaches.
But I’m lately known, for breaking bones, like osteoporosis.


If you couldn't tell, I tried to keep with just Bone related punches.

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was iight... fukk benny
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Post by Kuhlerblynd »

That fighting the curve line was fucking awesome. Lots of LOL lines in this one. Pretty sick diss, really. Alot different from your 'normal' rhyme scheme approach, but was easy to follow nonetheless... Solid drop.
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scoliosis line was my favorite, i liked how u started it, overall a decent drop
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Murk McNasty wrote:That fighting the curve line was fucking awesome. Lots of LOL lines in this one. Pretty sick diss, really. Alot different from your 'normal' rhyme scheme approach, but was easy to follow nonetheless... Solid drop.
Thanks. I've been watching a lot of Grindtime battles lately so I had that type of flow in my head when I wrote it.
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Post by Alvin »

There were a few lines i felt were filler, but for the most part i liked this as a diss... Maaaaan though, as if tearing into him on that battle wasnt enough, he prolly left to go kill himself. Nice drop Kau
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murder...ouch...niiiice
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Post by Defiance »

good shit man, cant really knock it. but i liked the similes and meta4s and how you stayed on topic..
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Re: Breakin' Bones

Post by Itz Nell »

lol @ hissy fit, but not a bad drop, decent multis, flow was consistent enough for my liking, that scoliosis was pretty dope man, maybe making to bones reference over used his name, but fuck it, good diss, keep it up
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Nice.. You Really Attack'd Your Opponent.. I Would Like To See More Battles..


Your Multies Was Eh'... Punches And Personals Was Hittin For Tha Most Part.. Solid Battle Verse OverAll..

Work On Your Style.. Create More Clever Metaphors And try to Perfect Multies to Elevate I Guess..



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Demo+ wrote:Nice.. You Really Attack'd Your Opponent.. I Would Like To See More Battles..


Your Multies Was Eh'... Punches And Personals Was Hittin For Tha Most Part.. Solid Battle Verse OverAll..

Work On Your Style.. Create More Clever Metaphors And try to Perfect Multies to Elevate I Guess..



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I think you were missing some of the longer multies but thanks for the feedback anyway.

BTW, I haven't seen Benny around here lately.
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