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Trouble Some!

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I spit “trap” that the lames can`t escape my ~disastarous flow~
From the “gap” behind I saw the rap game n stab it with ~ridiculous flow~
Ma bars are “problematic” diss me less niggas I’m way to “classic”
You don`t wanna beef a “lunatic”, I`ll run after ya head like the dinasour in “jurassic”
Heavily stomp on ur nuts with “jackboot” and your nose I`ll ~headboot~
Defeat me is like winnin a life “jackpot” , I`ll reap ya face off, in the grave u`ll be ~dead cute~/ deaf dude
Ya shit is ~procrastinated~ to watch mine run “eliminatin” mission on faggots disrespectin
Hot bars leave ya brain ~impregnated~ still on cranium"terminatin” with blood from ya ears eruptin
Homie you have to be dead to get the prove that this pyro dude is not a ~human being~
Yall niggas suck in rap but still fit in country music with the dressin code ~blue band jeans~
Xclusive “slangs” flow thru ma mouth with tongue runnin faster than tyson gay ~on the track~
Black carrot with effective “bang” on ya bitch front n back make her pussy burnin while leanin ~on her back~
Spittin ~poisonous~ bars to this muddafucker but they such in haist to catch the ~vibe n go~
I’m a fuckin ~tethanus~ livin sore on ya faces hundred paracetamol couldn’t kill I just ~bite n grow~
Because your father is an herdsman so you keep fuckin all the cattle`s
I could give yall a trial but in ya mind you already know it`s a lost battle
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not bad bro..keep em comin..I liked
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tnx man! jus some quick shit.. i put together as my first post in written rhymes on here.

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yeah i liked it it was an intresting verse with all the symbols and shit.. but good concepts for delivery. but work on the structure of the verse, shine it up a lil get rid of some of the fillers and this flow would kick
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aight bro.. tnx alot
i will work on that

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aight bro.. tnx alot
i will work on that
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Post by QwarterZ »

this was cool...some of your punches were alright....didnt blow me out the water...you start with a good idea and it gradually messes up the concept which seems to be irritating at times...nonetheless a nice drop from you...bulk it up some more next time though

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