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Itz Nell
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no longer blind

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ok i felt like someone smoothered my sight
had a plaster patch that covered my eye
whats the point of one eyeball when the other is blind
wasnt exactly something that i could of disguised
would of tied a rope around my neck by now
or wait to overheats my body and the rests a drought
still slit sight, so your probably fight a pirate
get this resolved, had to copyright iris
so vision, i dumbed it down with rest of me
ectasy and hallucinate just to let me see
no cataracts, just another inside problem
questioned myself and the reason to why i got them
its just an everyday struggle, just an everyday muggle
no magic for, not a spell for my eyes to create subtle
operation, left side and darkness un-binded
life saw half the world, the rest i get to find it
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liked it man, the concept was good the whole one eye shits, good flow stayed on point

welcome to illest bro
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It was a decent first drop. Flow was right on point.

7.5/10

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concept was dope..words were just really simple though..almost dumbed down...you'll get better
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thanks for the feedback
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8/10
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