NIGHT HAWK VS J STEEL (N.H. wins KO)

[Jsteel]

3 bars ,house rules,no flips, chek,il wait on your chek then drop b

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[- Night Hawk-]

check..

[Jsteel]

Ayt,ima send it in 2 or more messages cuz im using my phone and limited to space

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-- Wed Apr 27, 2011 5:21 am --

A BITER,a generic kid robin from batman became night hawk,check out this mirrored bitch leave em pieces scattered like vampires in heat/

-- Wed Apr 27, 2011 5:27 am --

I'll shatter this NIGHT HAWK,by a manner of light from ,the rapper of a bright DAWN,you'll melt down fella when i caw,you cant fathom what I SEE(icy)when i saw,your frozen hell is like my flaws,means nothing to my opponent,kill em off

-- Wed Apr 27, 2011 5:35 am --

DISFGURed(Diss figure),the skinny model ,cudnt get a women even if knighted the prince william,justa pin up doll ,im in boot camp,ur sleeping with sneakers,tramp,crush this freddy,i dont sleep,this night hawk couldnt get me

-- Wed Apr 27, 2011 5:36 am --

in rap....the end biaaatch

-- Wed Apr 27, 2011 5:36 am --

in rap....the end biaaatch

-- Wed Apr 27, 2011 5:40 am --

expo ...robin ,batmanz side kik,when he left batman he waz known az night hawk ...incase ya didnt get it

[- Night Hawk-]

its adeled scrippted with rappers profession.. cuz ill leave you resticted like ushers lady confessions//

im an iron clad like a steel workers profection.. so they think this bunk hard naw.. ill peel stell like sonning a contructed junk yard//

They think j swung hard, naw im the one too bust.. he's just beginners practice.. the way im sonnin steel is like a fiending blacksmith//

[Joe Saint]

alright this was a one sided battle

FLOW-NIGHT
NAMEPLAY-NIGHT
WORDPLAY-TIE
MULITIES-NONE THAT I COULD SEE
ENJOYMENT-NIGHT

MVGT-NIGHTHAWK

[- Night Hawk-]

thanks for vote saint 1-0

[Alvin]

FLOW- neither
NAMEPLAY- Night by a hair.
WORDPLAY- neither, if you guys had some, none stood out.
MULITIES- neither
ENJOYMENT- neither


This battle was rather difficult to judge because of its structure. Both of you should focus on some:
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That way it is easier for your readers to identify rhyme schemes, or flow, or s everything else because they get to focus on finding those things less. Night, your on your way man, I've read over some more current battles, or others, not too shabby. Jsteel, I know you are on a cell phone with limited space, try writing line by line instead of bar by bar my friend. That way we can better identify your battles.


MVGT Night Hawk

[ScottJames]

YEAH, THIS BATTLE WAS VERY BORING AND BLAN.
STEEL - U GOTTA STOP TYING FROM UR PHONE MAN, THAT SHIT IS LAME AND FUCKS EVERYTHING UP.

VOTE: NIGHTHAWK...CUZ HE HAD SOMEWHAT OF SOME NAMEPLAY IN THERE..

[Alvin]

-Thread Closed & Records Updated-

Night Hawk wins KO

-- Wed May 11, 2011 11:15 am --

-Thread Closed & Records Updated-

Night Hawk wins KO