Phone Numbers Remix (Need to collab)

[Audible Thought]

[soundclick]10451652[/soundclick]

I'm open to some collab's requests if anyone wants to jump on this, if i get 2 rappers on this its definately going on my mixtape. this aint mixed and mastered fully, but i thought i would show u guys cuz i think its DOPE!

Lyrics:
repping 416 and the 905 you bitch
im going ham going in land with omaha beach type of shit
ya light a spliff i enlighten this, third iris cant get
any higher than this aint buyin ur shit man i plan on dying rich,
flying like im icarus, past the sun better pack me a gun
cuz these mother fuckin haters never take this thing lightly
everybody wanna rap but cant do it like me
full of air like a nike pair critcism gettin to em wanna fight
the heir, to the throne if you wanna we can get it on
bare knuckles or spittin on the microphone
either way it doesnt matter i just let it go
im like an optimist cuz everything i do is pro
'woah, what the fuck yo
audible you ain't that good' yes i am bro
good enough to call out these ballers and face em one on one
they can't crossover genres or even know where the samples from
im done with rappin bout these wack artists after this verse
not talk about it but it'll still be loud when i bring on the hurt
everybody gunna feel it any minute any second like a cigarette
im bout to spark this earth
with intelligence and relevance mixed with the elements bombin thru
ur residence for what its worth

[Audible Thought]

thanks, uppin!

[Orfadox]

Shit Man I Like This The Beat Is Hot Il Jump On This Only Gotty A Shitty Laptop Mic At The Minute But I Want To Get On This

[Loon E Lou]

Im down to jump on

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[Kurse]

I like the underground feel of the production you chose. The sample in it was raw, definitely takes me back to the essence if you know what I mean!?!

I enjoy hearing emcee's slowing it down and then speeding it back up during the course of their tracks...but you have to becareful because little things can make parts of your verse seem "forced" if you don't syllabolize your bars perfectly aligned. You seemed to be on point for the majority of the verse, but it seemed a little stretched at the part in quote...

im like an optimist cuz everything i do is pro
'woah, what the fuck yo
audible you ain't that good' yes i am bro

...It came off somewhat forced. But other than that, you seem to be in good shape. You have a solid vocab and the mixing was decent. Can't wait to hear more of your mixtape as it comes to fruition. I give this joint a 7.5/10

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