Insane

[Shawnmd]

Looking for feedback, its always appreciated.

only right now, you have the support of your killa camp,
until i defeat them all, and come out still a champ,
my skill is damp, pain in your side like a killa cramp,
make you see the light that i use to fill a lamp,
your whole body language makes you look like a hard rock,
but when the verbal attack comes, you always have a guard block,
in the end, opponents try to offer a truce,
my flow is natural, yours just had to be from a sluice,
your defeat, down to the minute, a foretold prophecy,
tough guys like you, always like to reveal hypocrisy,
you put yourself out there too much like a kite,
until the repercussions come and you feel the smite,
dont do it if you cant do it as a individual,
painting the meaning, message inside the visual,
i use many tools and techniques that are historical,
determining destiny, not hearing it from a oracle,
disintegrating defenses, a flaming projectile,
if you already know this and start to give respect ill,
return it and not have to go inside my hovel,
and prepare for the inevitable, using my shovel,
you may think these are all jokes, merely just a hoax,
probably because its fresh, wait til the defeat soaks.

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[Grim]

good drop bro...nice multies...not too many internals but nice...your style and structure has gotten better too...respect

[Shawnmd]

thanks.

[S3V3NTH1RTY]

Sick drop. Crazy flow. Good structure. Whole drop was tight. Keep at it

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[Shawnmd]

Sorry, didn't have the links to my comments before.

[Audible Thought]

the multis in the first 4 bars are killer, good way to start it off. good vocab in this. Some decent punchlines this could be used in a battle for sure. From reading your writing i can tell you have an underground type of style but like i said in the previous one i commented on you should try and do something different. Use your creativity and have fun with it.

[Shawnmd]

Alright, ill try and do something different. Probably display my storytelling ablities.

[Quix]

your defeat, down to the minute, a foretold prophecy,
tough guys like you, always like to reveal hypocrisy,



My favorite bar ... nothing out of this world though. Nice lil drop at dah same time