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Fucking a round

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yo yo yo
I'm ready nowww i Think
pass that blunt

when i blast i bust
knocking a fat bitch off the stair case on the local bus :lol:
screaming I'm loco has fuck, with two middle fingers pointed up
(FUCK YOU)
I'm sick, so ill the doctors won't touch
walk into the room with two condoms attached to my damn nuts :o
my face keeps twitching, and my dicks been itching
ever since i fucked that bitch last Christmas in the missionary position
fucked up decisions, leave me in fucked up headings
so high, I'm not sure if I'm actually living :think:
send me to hell, can't find the staircase to heaven
I think, I think to much, my brain constantly gives me a headache
I get to stepping making the earth shake
earthquake spawning a wave the size of king Kong, japans now a lake :violin:
cold as a corpse laying on a metal slate
my mental state fucked up as a rapist debating against rape :think:
slicing you like mince meat
hence the boner i get when i hear you bitches scream and sreek
Crazy is who i B
a fucked up individual, a worse human being :lol:
see me, best get to fleeing
attacking you like a navy fleet :flags-usa:
cruise on a missile right threw your roof landing at your feet :dance:
verbally assaulting you so hard, you even get abused in your sleep
I am your Freddy and this nightmares on your street :lol:

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Re: Fucking a round

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flow was good went with the beat, but it also sounds like you were tryin to write like slim shady. which is allright but i'd like to see more creative current on that good of a beat. but there was some ill lines sprinkled in arround this piece. alot of lines that had potential but didnt really drive it home
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Re: Fucking a round

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HAHA Dat shit waz funny but it waz pretty goddamn awful... :P juzz fuckin wit u, AWESOME DUDE

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its called fucking a round. i have serious writtens, but still working on them. thanks for the feed

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