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just 2 verses

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Hey guys im new to this forum, and i wanted to drop 2 verses here.
Im from holland so it can be that it aint so sweet like all of you guys ;)

They call me quick but you can call me big.
Not to disrespect our great inspirition big.
But hey I wanna make some serious hits.
Your wasting your time on me with ya bitching.
Because when ya write ya feed I'm fucking ya bitch in the kitchen.
So rapper stop hating and watch ya bitch please.
I'm rapping over funky b-biets and you don't know what you see.
Im not a dealer, but tell me what you need, and I will see.
I will deliver it, but if u screw me up you get in sea.
It's what ya deserve, Don't trust any facking body.
So once again don't trust any, ya will and as an dead body.
I got my own rules, and if I follow it I will easily reach the forty.
For the respect I will make my rhymes,
And everyday I will think about new lines.
And new wordplays because hip hop is in my mind.
So if u hate me bro, I just don't mind.

You can see the competition as a game.
I already did the easy singleplayer game.
But now I want the multiplayer, because I'm a multi-player.
On top of the score boards, I always win from others.
Because all of them are bad motherfockers.
I killed all of you stupid infamous mc's.
And you know what now I got a big killstreak.
I Will eat all ya pussys like I eat a steak.
I will pretend that I'm big like big.
I will kill you and put you in a grave.
Or maybe even in a dark horror cave.
I can also put you in a large round box
And its easy to lock you up.
When you cry and ask me to stop.
I won't and let you feel focked op.
You can compare it with saw.
So now you know you shouldn't fuck with me unless I want yaw.

thx already
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Re: just 2 verses

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That was ok but u show a lot of potential

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Re: just 2 verses

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Thx bro!
I will drope some more if i work out my 2 verses ;)
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Re: just 2 verses

Post by Grim »

ok i'm not hating but here's some areas to improve on...you need to extend your vocab when you rhyme..don't repeat a word to rhyme unless it's combined in a multi. You had some nice potential with some lines but you missed your set ups for the killer punches....but over all being new to this your base is solid so keep at it....the more you write the more you'll expand
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