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[supersonic killa]

ill reck your dome and scatter the remaining pieces on the floorboard
precise pieces get torn
rugged teeth compare me too the megaldon, because i be the mega-don
ill make you swallow sediment, my posin pen came equiped with the h1n1 sickness
my precession will slice your bone marrow quick
toxic fumes consume from the toxic wasteland
you can bare the righteous tyrant

feedback please

[JiMMyJaM080691991]

hmm orite i cant tell what the flow would be like if u actually spit it. soubnd little clunky and how many words actually rhyme here.. tell me how to get rank up and shit.

[supersonic killa]

you just hating cause i beat you man. and i rhymed every word so stop hatin

[Duke]

Sounds like a verse that one of the dudes who sells weed to the Wu might be allowed to spit when the crew was too high to take it away from him.